Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that the way people dress today are influenced by global fastions trends.I believe its a negative development that global fation become such a strong influence on peoples lives but at some stage it migh seems positive because people allows to try different things that are new and follow fastionable trend.

On the one hand in the modern age people are becomes more independent and follow new fations and styles and follow trends.However its not bad to try new trends and to be independent in a positive way.For example now days esspecially young adults watch different trends by Ads,movies and on websites and follow these trends to make modern.But they far from there culture and tradition because when they saw their favourite celeberity in otheir fastionable style they must follow these things.

On the other hand it put negative impact on people esspecially on young adults.Moreover now days we see around each other we found a little individuals that follow their culture and tradition because every one want to look modern.Such as different types of brands promote their products through social media and through celeberities so people take interest in these things when they saw its famous globaly and they lose their interest in their cultural and traditional things.So from my perspective it took more negative outweigh than positive.

To sum up, although people should take interest in fastions and styles and must follow trends but they also should take interest and khnow about their culture and tradition.Overall both thingd=s are crucial but first care about their cultural heritage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that global fashion is mainly negative, while acknowledging that it can let people try new styles. You also address how trends spread, mentioning advertisements, websites, social media, and celebrities, and connect their influence to reduced interest in cultural traditions. However, the explanation of how fashion became influential is brief and mostly lists channels rather than explaining their impact. The positive side is also only briefly considered, and examples such as young adults following celebrities are not developed with a specific illustration. The conclusion repeats the cultural point but does not fully resolve the balance between benefits and harms. Develop each part with clearer cause-and-effect reasoning and more specific support to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The use of “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” helps signal the main stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together without clear links. For example, the first body paragraph moves from independence to trying trends, then to cultural distance and celebrity influence without explaining each connection. Repeated use of “because,” “so,” and “Moreover” also makes cohesion feel mechanical, and references such as “these things” are not always precise. Organise each paragraph around one main point and use clearer links between explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “brands,” “social media,” “celebrities,” and “cultural heritage,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “trends,” “fashion,” and “culture and tradition.” Frequent spelling errors, including “fastions,” “celeberities,” and “globaly,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “make modern” and “take interest in fashions.” Build a wider set of accurate expressions for describing influence and cultural change, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a concession in the opening and clauses introduced by “because” and “although.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader has to work to understand some points. Examples include “the way people dress today are influenced,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “people are becomes more independent,” which combines incompatible verb forms. Other problems include “it put negative impact” and “they saw,” where the verb form or tense does not fit the intended general meaning. Missing spaces after full stops and commas also affect readability. Practise accurate present-tense sentence patterns and check agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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