Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays dressing of many people is influenced by the global fashion trends.Which have actually really strong influence on people's lives.In my opinion this have negative aspects on people.

The main reason i oppose these fashion trends is because mainly these trends are for wealthy people which have enough capability to afford and follow these rapidly changing trends while most of the world population is just trying to go through lives,it will have negative influence on those.For example if a person who have just started to make his life,started his career with very less salary or even enough to tackle his needs see these people who heavily follow these trends and can afford,he will have a negative phsycological effect of poverty through these peoples really costly trending clothes.

Regardless of these negative phsycological effects there are also some other traps involves in these, most of the companies in fashion industry sponsor or give their clothes free for advertising purposed for example to a really famous singer or a film star which will just eventually wear these for one time and will not have to wear those clothes ever again but due to this phenomenon other people which are influenced by these stars in anyway will surely follow them to buy these clothes and they will not even care how costly they are buying them. In reality these clothes are really cheap and also have very less quality and value and just with help of strong influence on people these brands sell these poor quality clothes.

In conclusion i think these type of thing should be monitored and it should be taught to people how this fashion trends are just for phsycologiaclly trapping them and just making people think that this is actually needed in their life that they follow these trends.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear negative view and offer relevant reasons: global fashion can create pressure on people with limited incomes, and celebrity promotion can encourage consumers to buy expensive or poor-quality clothing. These points address the question about the effects of fashion trends. However, the explanation of how global fashion became influential is only partly developed: celebrity advertising is mentioned, but the role of social media, international brands, or online shopping is not explored. Some claims, such as that the clothes are “really cheap” and low quality, are broad and would benefit from a specific example or qualification. Develop both parts of the prompt more evenly and explain the links between each example and your position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion. The ideas also progress from financial and psychological pressure to celebrity advertising, with signposts such as “For example” and “In conclusion.” However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening uses sentence fragments, and “Regardless of these negative psychological effects” does not clearly introduce the additional point that follows. Several sentences are very long, making relationships between ideas harder to follow, particularly the example about a new worker and the discussion of celebrity clothing. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long sentences, and make references such as “these” and “this phenomenon” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “fashion industry,” “advertising,” and “psychological effect.” This gives you enough language to communicate your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “follow these trends,” “these people,” and “really costly trending clothes.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “phsycological,” “purposed,” and “phsycologiaclly,” which reduce accuracy and polish. Aim for more precise collocations and vary repeated wording; for example, describe the pressure to “keep up with trends” or the influence of “celebrity endorsements.” Proofreading would also help you correct spelling consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and relative clauses, as in “if a person who have just started to make his life…” This shows an effort to explain causes and consequences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to follow. Examples include “Which have actually really strong influence” as a sentence fragment, “this have negative aspects,” and “a person who have.” Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “the global fashion trends.Which” should be joined or punctuated correctly, and several long sentences need to be divided. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence construction, and controlled use of subordinate clauses before adding further complexity.

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