Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowdays, the ways of someone dress are affected by universal fashion movements. I think this is a negative trend because it influence people to waste their money and make them to look on an appearance only.

The first reason why global fashion give a bad influence to someone because it lead them to spent more money on buying new clothes once fashion outdated and sometime they are using the credit cards or pay later services. This habits cause them to collect more debt and ruin their life. For example, my daughter loves the wear shirts from Zara's collection and she will ask me to buy new clothes when the shop change their designs and collections. Supposely, this money should be spent wisely for something more important such as education and health.

Furthermore, this trend causes some individual to look on somebody based on their clothes and external appearances only and because of these judgement, the true potential of a individual will be missed. An ability to work and perform well are more important than the general looks that based on attires. For instance, most of rich people would dress simple and not influence by the changing of the fashions because they really appreciate the true value of person. So, people can show their talent and personolity without wearing the up-to-date trends clothes.

In conclusion, I believe that worldwide style give negative impacts to someone's lives because they tend to overspent and looks down on the other people capabality and performance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider global fashion a negative development, and you give two relevant reasons—overspending and judging people by appearance. The examples about your daughter buying Zara clothes and the importance of education and health help make the first point concrete. However, the task also asks how global fashion became such a strong influence, and this part is not directly explained. You describe some effects of fashion, but do not discuss its causes, such as social media, advertising, or international brands. The second argument is also broad: the claim about rich people dressing simply is not fully supported. Address both questions explicitly and develop each example with clearer explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. Sequencing phrases such as “The first reason” and “Furthermore” make the progression easy to follow, and the examples are placed alongside the points they illustrate. This coherent arrangement meets the lower-band expectations, while the clear paragraphing and progression show some features of stronger organisation. To make the links more natural and precise, avoid relying on formulaic transitions and clarify references such as “this trend” and “these judgement.” The conclusion could also synthesise the two arguments rather than simply repeat them. More explicit links between each claim, its example, and its consequence would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “global fashion,” “credit cards,” “debt,” “external appearances,” and “up-to-date trends.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “pay later services” and “true potential.” However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “people,” “clothes,” and “fashion,” and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts less natural. For example, “look on somebody based on their clothes” and “overspent” do not express your meaning idiomatically; “judge someone by their clothes” and “overspend” would be clearer. Spelling and word-form errors, including “Nowdays” and “personolity,” are noticeable. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for causes and effects of fashion trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a longer sentence explaining how judgement can cause someone’s potential to be missed. The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur often enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “it influence people” needs subject–verb agreement, while “it lead them to spent” combines an incorrect verb form with an incorrect infinitive pattern. In “this habits,” the demonstrative and noun do not agree, and “a individual” needs the correct article. Practise building accurate clauses with consistent subjects and verbs, and check articles and singular/plural forms. Greater control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to read.

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