Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, dressing styles are influenced by global fashion trends, that has a strong influence on people's lives. This phenomena has largely been driven by fashion influencers, celerbrities, and expansion of fashion industry that has been a easy access through social media domination. In my opinion, this trend has negative impact in the socuity as this leads to over consumption and purchasing of useless items for the sake of trends.

There are many reasons for the strong influence of social media. On of them is that, photoshoots, videos, and brand campaingn are now daily showcased at the social media for the sake of views and appreciation among generation. People usually adapt these fashion trends to feel encouraged to follow these fashionable and modern up to date. Secondly, international brands are expanding and now available everywhere so a consequence fashion products are easily accesible for the customers.

Despite these advantages, there are many negative impact on the society. One major concern is that people frequently buy products that trendy for a short period of time that leads them financially challanging. Secondly. the widespread adaptation of international product weakened the traditional clothing purchases. Pakistani young adults generally perfer western clothing style over traditional wear, such as shalwar kameez, on certain occasion.

Another significant issue of the surge demand of fashion industry is the mass production of clothing items, that leads to textile waste and enviormental pollution.

In conclusion, global fashion as become highly influential becaue of sicial media , celebrities and international brand. Although it provide great access to style and fashion, I believe it leads to overconsumption and loss of tradituion.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both parts of the prompt: you explain the influence of social media, celebrities and international brands, and clearly judge the trend negatively. The reasons are relevant, especially the link between short-lived trends and financial pressure, and the example of Pakistani young adults choosing Western clothing over shalwar kameez. The environmental point about textile waste adds another consequence. However, the explanation of how these influences work is less fully developed: for example, you mention campaigns being shown for views and appreciation, but do not explain how this exposure changes purchasing decisions. Some claims, such as the effect on traditional clothing, would also benefit from a more specific example or explanation. This gives the response solid coverage, with some ideas needing fuller support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction states your position, the body paragraphs cover causes and negative effects, and the conclusion restates your view. Sequencing is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “Secondly” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. However, some linking is mechanical or imprecise. “Despite these advantages” is not quite suitable because the preceding paragraph mainly explains causes rather than advantages, and “so a consequence” does not clearly connect the ideas. The environmental point is placed in a separate short paragraph, but its relationship to the preceding discussion could be made clearer. Use more precise transitions and connect each paragraph’s main idea to the next to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “international brands,” “traditional wear,” “overconsumption” and “textile waste.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and there are attempts at more specific language. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “celerbrities,” “campaingn,” “sociuty,” “perfer” and “enviormental” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “fashionable and modern up to date,” “daily showcased” and “widespread adaptation of international product.” Aim for accurate collocations and forms, such as “promoted daily,” “keep up with current styles” and “widespread adoption of international brands.” Proofreading would help your vocabulary appear more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “that,” “as” and “although,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some sentence patterns are effective, such as the sentence explaining that short-lived trends can create financial difficulty. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction recur. For example, “This phenomena has” should use a singular demonstrative and noun, while “global fashion as become” needs the correct auxiliary verb. In “international brands are expanding and now available everywhere,” the second verb needs an auxiliary, and “there are many negative impact” has a plural agreement problem. Review these patterns and check punctuation, particularly the full stop after “Secondly,” which interrupts the paragraph. More accurate control of these structures would strengthen the response.

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