Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowadays, global fashion is considered is one of the concerning issues in modern society. The way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends .
It is generally believe that the global fashion many advantages and disadvantage . There are many positive and negative effect in the global fashion . The global fashion as different types of clothes . These clothes has many positive and negative effect in this world. This fashion clothes has didn't allow to Islam . Islam did not permission to wear the new trend fashion clothes it has most negative effect in this fashion . Islam can do permission we should live simply . We should live simply in according to Islam has more positive effect . Global fashion exerts a powerful Influence on people's lives primarily through digital media, social networks, different tends and constant advertising. People constantly see styling trends on platforms like TikTok and Instagram, which shape how they dress, express their identity, and perceive beauty. These platforms in social media has many negative effect in this children. Furthermore, clothing serves as a vital tool for social belonging and personal confidence, allowing individuals to connect with global communities and project their desired self-image to the world. These trends has this negative effect in the children . The children didn't go to school and can improve bad habits .
In conclusion , these trends has both positive and negative effect is this world . And the social media trend ha both negative effect in this children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response makes a limited attempt to address both questions: it mentions social media as a way global fashion spreads and refers to effects on identity and children. However, the explanation of how fashion became influential is brief, and the positive-versus-negative judgement is unclear. The opening says there are advantages and disadvantages, while the conclusion does not state which side you consider stronger. The discussion of Islam and clothing is difficult to connect to the question and is not explained with a specific example. The response is also 8 words below the 250-word minimum; the 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop a clear position and support each main point with relevant explanation or an example.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a recognisable opening and conclusion, and the paragraph beginning “Global fashion exerts a powerful Influence” introduces relevant points about digital media and social belonging. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the discussion moves from Islam to social media, then to children and school without explaining the links. Repeated statements such as “positive and negative effect” do not advance the argument, and connectors such as “Furthermore” cannot compensate for unclear relationships between points. Paragraphing is limited, with several different ideas crowded together. Organise the response into focused paragraphs—for example, one on how social media spreads trends and another evaluating their effects—and use clear references to connect each explanation to the main question.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response includes some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “digital media,” “social networks,” “advertising,” “social belonging,” and “self-image.” These terms show an attempt to discuss the topic beyond very basic clothing vocabulary. However, much of the wording is repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated uses of “positive and negative effect” and “fashion clothes.” Several phrases are difficult to interpret, such as “different tends” and “Islam did not permission,” which make the intended meaning less clear. Aim for accurate collocations and more specific terms when describing consequences. For example, distinguish between “influence,” “pressure,” and “impact,” and name particular outcomes such as consumer spending or pressure to conform.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, including “People constantly see styling trends on platforms like TikTok and Instagram, which shape how they dress.” This sentence shows an effort to connect ideas with a relative clause. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “the way people dress today are influenced,” “It is generally believe,” and “These clothes has,” where agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Sentence construction is also faulty in “Islam can do permission we should live simply,” and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex structures; then check each sentence for a clear subject and main verb.
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