Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

We are living in modern world, firstly people are heavily influenced by what they see around them by means of fashion commercial, magazines, and the society around them. before the existence of global fashion trends, secondly people have little to know idea how to dress accordingly for a certain event or place, and that gap was successfully covered by the fashion industry by leaving strong footprint on people's lives. and personally i feel that global the fashion creates a huge impact in a positive way by spreading awarness in the society.

Firstly the fashion industry creates a strong influence in the minds of people through fashion commercials and magazines, portraying cloths on beautiful models to create urge in the society that they need to look good and stand out in room full of peoples, and to dress according to a certain event for instance the global fashion make the trend famous through commercial showing how bride stand out entirely different on her ceremony event and marked white color specifically for the bride to wear on her wedding.

secondly people never really used to wear specific colors or follow dress code on multiple ocassions but with the worldwide fashion trends change the narrative of people and influenced them into attending certain ocassions and events in uniformity as a symbol to deliever a message for others to understand. For instance the global fashion industry influenced the people in past by making commercial ads, showing how all the people attending the funeral are dress in formal black, and marked black color specifically for mourning ocassion

i feel that global fashion industry created a major positive impact in the lives of people. As it puts uniformity for some events which was a necessity, and make awarness in the people that how they can the be more appealing to people by simple way of contrasting in colors and by wearing different designs of clothing for multiple events the fashion industry also bought some negative developments but the advantages are far more in this regard.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you explain the influence of advertising and magazines, and you state that global fashion is a positive development. Examples such as wedding clothing and black attire at funerals make your discussion relevant. However, the explanation of how fashion became influential is narrower than it could be: the response focuses mainly on commercials and social expectations, without developing other possible drivers such as social media, celebrity culture, or international brands. Your positive position is clear, but the claim that fashion creates awareness and uniformity is repeated more than it is explained, and the brief acknowledgement of negative effects is not developed. Extend these ideas with specific reasoning and examples to make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure, moving from an introduction to two explanatory paragraphs and then a conclusion. The use of “Firstly,” “secondly,” and “For instance” helps signal the main points, and the examples generally follow the ideas they illustrate. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several points are joined into long sentences, and the opening uses “firstly” and “secondly” in a confusing sequence. The final paragraph also combines the positive view, a concession, and several supporting claims without clear separation. Use one main idea per paragraph, make links between claims explicit, and check that pronouns such as “it” and “they” have clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “dress code,” “uniformity,” “contrasting colours,” and “mourning.” These choices help communicate the subject and show attempts to express ideas beyond basic clothing terms. However, inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations sometimes make the wording less natural, as in “fashion commercial,” “cloths,” “make awarness,” and “deliever a message.” Some phrases are also vague or awkward, such as “stand out in room full of peoples” and “the fashion industry also bought some negative developments.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully; more precise vocabulary will help you explain the influence and effects of fashion with greater clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “before” and “as,” and sentences that give examples. This shows some range, but control is inconsistent: several sentences contain multiple clauses without clear punctuation, which makes relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, the opening runs together several points, while “As it puts uniformity for some events…” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. There are also errors with articles, agreement, and verb forms, such as “in modern world,” “how bride stand out,” and “the fashion industry also bought.” Use shorter, complete sentences when needed, and check sentence boundaries, verb forms, and article use during revision.

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