Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

many people have a great attraction on the global fashion trends that is continue these days.i strongly agree with this view.i would argue that by the attraction of people to the global trends are very highly economical for the world and produce more style for the people to live in these advanced era.

on the one hand, by the attraction of people to the global trends lot of new development are continued.one of the benefits is that people are very well dressed to represent their own personality and represent the modern fashion all over the world,by this,individuals convert their ideas about modern world to a great extent.for example,in advanced countries,people represent their new trend by their body language and represent their country fashion to all over the world and make their country progress.

on the second hand,the new trend has a great impact on the traditional customs or fashions also remove the old customs from the world because when all the people are transmitted to the global new fashion then nobody follow the conservative fashion.by this, the young generation does not show have any interest on the old customs and the conservative fashion totally destroyed.for instance,in the under developed countries the young generation does not have any idea about their old customs of their ancestors and move on to the global trend by this they remain unaware and in a bad position.

in conclusion,by following the new trend the global world show their personality and make a modern personality for the world but forgive the old customs of their forefather and does not show their old culture and they try to make new global person for the modern world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by discussing why global fashion attracts people and whether its effects are beneficial or harmful. Your position is broadly negative about the loss of traditional customs, but it is not consistently clear: the opening calls the influence beneficial, while the conclusion presents both modern self-expression and cultural loss without clearly deciding which outweighs the other. The explanation of influence is also limited. You mention people representing their personality and modernity, but do not explain the wider forces that make trends influential, such as social media, advertising, celebrities, or international brands. The examples about advanced and underdeveloped countries are general and need specific support. State your overall judgement clearly and develop each main reason with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting effects, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through your ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and the linking phrases are repetitive or awkward. For example, “on the one hand” is followed by “on the second hand,” while “by this” is repeatedly used to connect claims that do not always follow clearly from one another. The conclusion also repeats earlier points rather than resolving the contrast between modern fashion and cultural loss. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each explanation directly to its example, and vary linking language. Make sure pronouns and references clearly identify the people or ideas being discussed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global trends,” “personality,” “traditional customs,” and “conservative fashion,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “global trend,” “old customs,” and “represent.” Some word combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “great attraction on,” “very highly economical,” and “make a modern personality for the world.” These choices sometimes make your intended meaning difficult to interpret. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and learn common collocations as complete phrases. For instance, you could describe trends as “spread through social media” and say that fashion “allows people to express their identity.” Check word forms and spelling as well, including “underdeveloped.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences and use some subordinate clauses, including “because when all the people are transmitted to the global new fashion,” but these complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur throughout: “that is continue,” “lot of new development are continued,” and “nobody follow” need different grammatical forms. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also frequently inaccurate, as in “the young generation does not show have any interest.” Most sentences therefore require effort to understand, even though the overall topic can usually be followed. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, articles, and full stops between complete ideas.

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