Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the contemporary era, global fashion trends has increasingly being common in the world. Several people claims that in which individual getting dress are directly influenced through world fashion show. However, I believe that it is a positive development because individual are being more beauty consious and make them more stylish. This essay will shed light on why it is a positive development and the reason will be discussed in the further paragraph.

To commence with, there are several reasons behind why people are become more influenced by global fashion trends. The first and foremost reason is that social media which means that these days many bloggers or creators are being uploaded new posts, videos on different platforms such as instagram, snapchat and tiktok where people start copying their style, dressing sense just because to look stylish. For instance, 80% of the individual start using expensive cosmetics and apply on their skin to make it more beautiful. Consequently, these are some reasons which directly support my belief ans state the explanantion why people are influenced by fashoion trend.

However, I believe that it is a positive development. The myraid reason is that getting jobs oppotunities. This is because there are many such job which usually have strict requriment of doing fashion jobs like air hosteres, hotel manangement etc. Which need the women who is well dressed, well organized etc. Therefore, these are some reasons of this belief.

In conclusion, although fashion trend become crucial nowadays people are being more beauty consious using expensive costemetic, taking expensive beauty treatments in order gain attention from others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that global fashion is positive, and you identify social media as one reason it has become influential. However, the response only partially develops both parts of the question. The social-media point is relevant, but the example about expensive cosmetics shifts from clothing trends and is not explained as evidence of fashion’s influence. The second body paragraph says fashion creates job opportunities, yet it does not clearly explain how this makes global fashion a strong influence on people’s lives or support the claim with a specific example. The conclusion also introduces beauty treatments and gaining attention rather than clearly summarising the argument. Develop each main idea with a direct explanation and relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “To commence with” and “However” signal paragraph transitions. However, progression within and between ideas is often unclear. The first body paragraph moves from social-media posts to cosmetics and then repeats that these are reasons, without showing the links clearly. “However” suggests a contrast, although the next paragraph continues the positive position rather than presenting an opposing view. Some linking phrases, including “Therefore” and “In conclusion,” do not lead to a clear summary of the preceding argument. Improve cohesion by organising each paragraph around one point, explaining it in sequence, and using transitions that accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “social media,” “dressing sense,” “job opportunities” and “beauty treatments.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general topic, but the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “beauty consious,” “fashoion trend,” “myraid reason,” and “air hosteres.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “getting jobs opportunities” and “fashion jobs,” while “expensive cosmetics” does not precisely support the point about clothing trends. Build accuracy by checking spelling and word forms, and learn natural collocations such as “career opportunities,” “fashion industry,” and “follow current trends.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “This is because there are many such job…” and the sentence beginning “although fashion trend become crucial nowadays.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “global fashion trends has,” “people are become,” and “the women who is well dressed.” The sentence beginning “Which need the women…” is also a fragment, and the opening sentence of the introduction is difficult to interpret because its verb forms are incorrect. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check that each sentence has a complete main clause.

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