Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, the choice of people's dressing have been greatly influenced by global fashion trends which has attracted considerable attention. There are several reasons for this developments and I believe that it is generally negative trends.

There are several reasons why the global fashion has become greatly influential. One of the major reason is social social because when individuals watch Instagram, Facebook and many other apps in which their favorite celebrities encourage them to buy the product. This is because they try to buy those influential product. Low-income individuals sometimes can not buy these things due to this they feel inferior. International brands like Gucci offer expensive clothing which is unaffordable for limited income resources. Consequently, fashion trends can create unnecessary social pressure among people.

Furthermore, one of major disadvantage of global fashion trends is the loss of cultural identity. This is because people are increasingly influenced by Western lifestyles and clothing styles. They prefer to adopt foreign fashion instead to following their country traditional clothing customs. For example, in Pakistan youngsters promote Western culture and all those stuffs instead of wearing Shalwar-Kameez. Due to this they wear all the time pants and shirt and even try to speak English instead of Urdu. Moreover, another major factor can face many people is environmental change. This is because to fulfill the requirements of new styles. Due to this factories can run in greater range and factories can cause air pollution. Air pollution can cause many diseases like asthma.

To sum up, global trends have become increasingly due to social media and international celebrities. I believe this it is negative impact because it affects on underprivileged individuals, reduce the importance of traditional clothing and causes environmental problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both parts of the question: social media and celebrity promotion explain how global fashion spreads, and you clearly judge its effects as negative. The points about pressure on lower-income people, cultural identity and pollution are relevant, with examples such as Gucci and traditional Pakistani clothing. This meets the task well, and the clear position and range of relevant ideas show some qualities of a stronger response. However, the explanation of how fashion becomes influential is narrower than the discussion of its disadvantages, and several claims need fuller support. For example, explain more specifically how online exposure turns into purchasing choices, and develop the environmental point by linking fast-changing styles to increased production and waste. The example about speaking English also needs a clearer connection to clothing trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from the influence of social media to cultural and environmental effects, and signposting such as “Furthermore” and “To sum up” helps readers follow the argument. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several sentences begin with “This is because” or “Due to this,” and some links between ideas are unclear. The second body paragraph combines cultural identity and environmental damage without a clear transition, while “another major factor can face many people” makes the relationship difficult to follow. Use topic sentences to distinguish the two disadvantages, and vary referencing and linking so that each sentence clearly builds on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “cultural identity,” “traditional clothing” and “air pollution.” These choices make the main ideas clear, and phrases such as “social pressure” and “underprivileged individuals” show an attempt to express more precise concepts. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision. Examples include “social social,” “influential product,” “limited income resources,” “all those stuffs” and “environmental change” where the intended meaning appears to be environmental damage. Some expressions are also too general, such as “these things.” Build accuracy by learning common word partnerships and selecting terms that express the exact idea, rather than relying repeatedly on “major,” “due to this” and “things.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” and most of the argument remains understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction occur across the response, and some complex sentences are difficult to follow. For example, “the choice of people's dressing have been” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “There are several reasons for this developments” has a number mismatch. The sentence beginning “Moreover, another major factor can face many people” is structurally unclear, and “I believe this it is negative impact” contains an incomplete construction. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct singular/plural agreement, and a complete clause. Shortening overloaded sentences would also improve control.

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