Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Developing world is also causing many positive and negative impacts on the living terms and conditions of people. This modernism is also causing the impact on the dressing sense of people. This trend in my opnion is negative thing that people are getting influenced my global trends of dressing.

Modernism is now such a headache present in todays world. People are trying to get more and more advanced. Because this modernism is now seen as succes of life. People try to be the trend makers so that everyone will get to know abiut them. This thing despite having its positive development cause many negative impacts on the society. For example when people try to follow the modern trends they will leave their own culture behind. This neglecting of culture make the person unaware of its roots and so a person may loose its representation values. A person may become modern and advanced but in actual he lose his own values.

On the other hand adopting modernisms and recent dressing fashions cause the person to look good according to advanced fashions. Adapting to modern fashion values may help a person to make its way into modern society more easliy and the society acepts him its own part. So according to this statement the modernism is very important to be adopted in a life my person.

In conclusion I would like to say that becoming modern is not a bad thing but a person have to remember its base from which he belongs. Dressing in a modern way is very important but traditional values of a person are more important as they cannot be neglected on any price in my thinking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that global fashion has both benefits and drawbacks, and your conclusion prioritises preserving cultural identity. The point that people may “leave their own culture behind” is relevant, as is the idea that following current styles can help someone fit into society. However, the task asks how global fashion became such a strong influence, and this is only partly addressed: “people are trying to get more and more advanced” does not explain the channels or forces behind the trend. The positive and negative effects are also asserted rather than developed with specific examples or explanation. To strengthen the response, explain causes such as social media, advertising, or international brands, then support each effect with a concrete example and maintain a clear position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs presenting drawbacks and benefits, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several ideas repeat rather than build—for example, “modernism” and being “modern and advanced” recur without adding much explanation. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” are useful, but some connections are mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between claims. The reference in “according to this statement” is also unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one main point, explain it, and then give an example; use more precise links between cause, effect, and contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “global trends,” “dressing sense,” “traditional values,” and “representation.” This gives the response a basic vocabulary for discussing fashion and culture. However, the range is limited, and repeated use of “modernism,” “modern,” and “advanced” makes several points sound imprecise. Some word choices and collocations are awkward, such as “living terms and conditions,” “trend makers,” and “make its way into modern society.” Spelling errors, including “opnion,” “succes,” “abiut,” and “easliy,” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Build a more precise range for causes and effects of fashion, and check spelling and collocations carefully when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “when people try to follow the modern trends they will leave their own culture behind.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in examples such as “This neglecting of culture make” and “he lose”; articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “the modernism is very important to be adopted in a life my person.” These errors recur and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and pronoun reference, and build longer sentences from clear clauses. Proofread each sentence to ensure that its subject and verb match.

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