Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Mostly people aspects dress of the way by global fashion trends. I think that is not a strong influence the main reason is that every country have own culture. My opinion this is a negative development in people.

The watching the filim and dreams in mobile or tv then take idea of the dressing or fashion. This influance is a negative development in the because that people leaving own culture and can't adjust own socity or country. The people face the different type of problem when influanced the global fashion trends and people angry on this type of person due to there is not matching with the local culture and socity.

Once, my friend ahamd where the shirt and going to one home when people see the ahamd then upset becuase in my socity people weare cloths. In my area there is not weare the pent shirt and ahamd impressed from the global fashion trends and go to home into pent shirt so due to this reason the culture is not matching with you and people not to see in good way and ignore you. I mean there is not a positive influence.

Conclusion, my opionion there is a negative develpment global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives because the people can't match with local culture and leave the local feature so this is not a good way of influence. People used the local fashion trends then lives in your own area or socity and enjoy your own culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear negative view, and your example about Ahamd wearing trousers and a shirt in a community with different clothing expectations is relevant to your concern about cultural conflict. However, the task asks both how global fashion became influential and whether this is positive or negative. You briefly mention films, television and mobile phones as sources of ideas, but this explanation is unclear and the negative effects are repeated rather than developed with distinct reasons or support. The response is also 242 words, below the required 250; the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain more clearly how media and global communication spread trends, then develop your position with a specific, well-explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The personal example is placed in its own paragraph, and phrases such as “Once” and “Conclusion” signal movement between sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and the same point—that global fashion conflicts with local culture—is repeated in the introduction, body and conclusion without adding much new development. Connections between ideas are also unclear, as in “The watching the filim and dreams in mobile or tv then take idea.” Use a clearer sequence: explain the sources of influence first, then discuss the effects, and finish with your judgement. More precise linking and references would help readers follow how each sentence relates to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “global fashion trends,” “culture,” “local culture” and “influence,” so the central topic is identifiable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “people,” “culture” and “influence.” Frequent spelling and word-choice problems—such as “influance,” “socity,” “develpment” and “leaving own culture”—make parts of the response difficult to understand. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “the culture is not matching with you” and “people not to see in good way.” Build a more precise set of phrases for explaining causes and effects, and check spelling carefully. Using alternatives such as “adopt,” “traditional clothing” and “social disapproval” would make your meaning clearer and more appropriate for this topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and consequences, including with “because” and “so,” and you use both short statements and longer sentences. However, the range of sentence structures is very limited, and frequent errors in basic grammar often obscure meaning. Examples include “every country have own culture,” “people leaving own culture,” and “people used the local fashion trends,” where agreement, verb forms or sentence construction are not controlled. Articles and possessives are also often missing, as in “in my socity” and “own culture.” Several sentences combine multiple ideas without clear grammatical boundaries, especially the account of your friend. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then join related ideas with correctly formed clauses; check subject–verb agreement, verb tense and articles in each sentence.

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