Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This statement shows the aspects of the way of people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. I think people should avoid it. Mean while the main reason is the places where they are lived . Moreover their culture, Although culture has great impects on a man life, Along with for example If a man is lived in villages of pakistan , He can not wear trouser and shirt. Any how the national dress of the pakistan is qameez shalwar. No doubt it is form of the fashion sence that bloom our socity and having effect on it. Furhter more the second reason is the mindset of people . they thought that modern dressing making us more elite as well as most beautifull. But it is their forgetness like it is not good for them. For intence a lady is lived in any village she would be prefer the modern clothes which may be small as well as may be fashionable. But at once she would be looking cringe.Although It will lose her aura, As compare to the city if she lived in city she can ware all the types of scelts. Any how i think so we should adopt the clothes and as well as fashion scence according the place where we are lived in. In conclusion However It is well saying clothes or dress should be clean not the new according the fashion scence. A person should wear a]clothes according their class or places otherwise it will make him more cring

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear general view that people should not follow global fashion uncritically, and you mention culture, location and social status as influences. However, the task asks both how global fashion became influential and whether this is positive or negative. The response focuses mainly on why people choose particular clothes and does not explain the global spread of fashion, such as social media, advertising or international brands. Your judgement is also difficult to follow: you call fashion influential, but do not clearly assess its overall effects. Examples about village and city clothing are relevant but are not developed enough to support the argument. The response is 245 words, five words below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to move from cultural influences to people’s mindset and then to a concluding recommendation. This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and several points run together, making the argument difficult to follow. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Any how,” “Although” and “Further more” are often used inaccurately or without a clear relationship between the sentences. For example, the contrast between village and city clothing is introduced but not clearly connected to the main question about global trends. Use separate paragraphs for the causes, your evaluation and the conclusion, and make each transition express a precise logical link.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary related to the topic, including “global fashion trends,” “national dress,” “mindset” and “modern clothes,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear or unnatural, such as “fashion sence that bloom our socity,” “lose her aura” and “looking cringe.” Spelling errors, including “impects,” “beautifull” and “Furhter,” also reduce clarity. Some expressions appear to be chosen for emphasis rather than precise meaning. Build a more accurate set of topic vocabulary and check spelling; for instance, describe how trends “spread through social media” or how clothing “reflects cultural identity,” rather than relying on vague or informal phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, including “Although culture has great impects on a man life” and the example beginning “If a man is lived in villages of pakistan.” However, sentence structures are very limited in control, and frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and punctuation sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “they are lived” and “a lady is lived” use an incorrect passive form, while “they thought” shifts tense without a clear reason. Several clauses are joined with commas or capitalised conjunctions, as in “Although culture…,” which makes sentence boundaries unclear. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one controlled subordinate clause, such as “People in villages may prefer traditional clothing because it reflects local customs.”

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