Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era, fashion is a requirement of everyone. Some believe, current fashion has a major influence on the lives of people thtough-out the world. While some argue that global fashion impact is more stonger on their lives.

In my opinion it would be a nagetive development.

On the one hand, fashion become a trend and everyone wants a high class look. They can easily spend their whole salary to acheive this. They purchased heavy clathes and jewellery that is out of budget and their income is quiet limited. Moreover, they purchased too much item, so other family members will also disturbed. For example, i know a man who purchased a lot for their current faction and all their cupbured was full and they wear it just one-time.

On the other hand, some people purchased according to new trend but they wear their outlets multiple times. They save their money as well as time and fuel. That is a positive attitude and their whole family stay away from stress because when they purchased items that are although in trend but cause sever stree in their lives. For example, a family that done all their purshasing in a budget become happy and stress-free.

In conclusion, although trends should be a good thing to follow, but everything done on a minimum bedget is good for both fashion or healthy life style ans it would be a nagetive trend to serve all incoime or savings on trendy fashion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear negative view in “In my opinion it would be a nagetive development” and return to this position in the conclusion. You also offer relevant points about overspending, limited budgets and family stress, with brief examples. However, the task asks how global fashion became such a strong influence, and this part is not really explained: the response focuses mainly on the effects of following trends. The positive/negative discussion is also uneven and sometimes unclear, since the second body paragraph describes budgeting as positive without clearly evaluating global fashion itself. The examples are too general to develop the ideas fully. The response is four words below the required minimum, and the ideas need more explanation and support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its basic structure. The main points are grouped into paragraphs, and examples are introduced with “For example.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the second paragraph shifts from buying fashionable items to saving “time and fuel” without explaining the connection. Some linking phrases are used mechanically or inaccurately, and references such as “they” and “their” are not always clear. The conclusion repeats the budget point rather than bringing the discussion together. Make each paragraph develop one clear idea in a logical sequence, and use transitions that show the precise relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “global fashion,” “trend,” “salary,” “budget,” “jewellery” and “stress,” which helps communicate the general subject. There are also attempts at less common expressions such as “high class look.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, including “nagetive,” “clathes,” “cupbured” and “faction.” Some combinations are unnatural, such as “purchased heavy clothes” and “serve all income or savings on trendy fashion.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Repeating “purchased” and “trend” also limits variety; alternatives such as “buy,” “spend on,” and “fashionable clothing” would help.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few complex structures, including “While some argue…” and “although trends should be a good thing to follow,” and you use both simple and joined sentences. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to interpret. For example, “fashion become a trend” has an incorrect verb form, while “other family members will also disturbed” is missing a verb construction. In “a family that done all their purshasing,” the tense and clause structure are faulty. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “fashion is a requirement of everyone” and the comma after “believe.” Practise accurate past and present forms, complete verb phrases, and clear sentence construction before adding more complex clauses.

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