Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

By many circumstances its true people are trying to follow influencers and T.V stars. No doubt they have a great impact on our lives and on our life styles, Especially on our dressing and our fashion sense. According to my point of view it is positive change as well as it has its negative impact on youth.

Firstly, The social media influencers are increasing day by day and there living style is attracting our youth. Its the time of technology and social media, everyone has breaking news all time in his hand. For example before some time people have just models and tv actress and they just watch them and it was a source of entertainment. Moreover, its time of electronic media. It is trying to catch young generation. They are just trying to copy influencers their life style, their dressing sense and their way of living. It have positive sense when youth is becoming modern and decent. They are learning about new trends which is good for their career and their social circle.IT also enhance their knowledge.

In other case, students are just dependent on social media stars life. They have to fix it in there mind they just have to follow them. now there are many issues to follow them, like Financial issues, religious issues and many other family problems. Everyone can not follow them. Influencers have to promote many products and lifestyle things by which they are highly paid.

To conclude that, the fashion industry is increasing day by day and it have a great sense of fashion which increase our fashion sense but to follow all fashion and style is not possible for everyone. Its very essential to understand this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'financial issues' and 'religious issues' in the third paragraph is underdeveloped; the essay would benefit from concrete examples or a more detailed explanation of how these factors manifest. While a position is stated, the arguments lack depth and the conclusion is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear reasoning and specific illustrations rather than just listing potential problems.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In other case', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical or unnatural, such as 'In other case' (which should be 'On the other hand'). The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal structure of the paragraphs could be improved to ensure that sentences flow more smoothly. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the subject of 'They' shifts between influencers and the youth, which can momentarily confuse the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'good', 'great', and 'things'. Some collocations are awkward, such as 'living style' instead of 'lifestyle' and 'fashion sense' being used repeatedly. While the meaning is generally clear, there is little evidence of less common lexical items or idiomatic language. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms and ensuring that words are used in their correct collocations to convey ideas with greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('They are just trying to copy influencers their life style' and 'It have positive sense') and incorrect verb forms ('everyone has breaking news all time in his hand'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary capitalization ('IT also') and missing articles. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve the clarity.

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