Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the fast moving World, every thing is changed quickly. With the time people has changed their taste of dressing. As this is the social media time where everything is changed with trends. In addition that no fashion stands for long time when a new trend is start the older one is end. Young's like wear dresses in new styles and try different colours to seek fame.

New fashion trends changed the whole fashion world. Now i am going to tell you my point of view on it. I think we must follow the trends to stay in the social life. In addition to it i want share my real life story on it. Once i went to a farewell party which was arranged for summer actives. there we all were dressed up according to the weather and party theme. but my one friend wear a traditional dress which make him different in the party. It looks too boring and unconformable. Everyone was thinking he has no sense of dressing which he feels too.

On the other hands i also want to mentioned that it no need to follow every fashion trends because not every trends suits you. Everyone should try those trends in which they feel conformable. Wear dress according to time and need if there is a culture event so wear traditional not formal. As like fashion sense is more important then following new ideas. I remember once my uncle dressed up in old 90's theme in a cultural gathering and he was looking so handsome as that everyone was very impressed from him.

In my opinion following trends is great thing but in some conditions and limits. Do not take trends too seriously that you forget your personality and start trying low level trends too.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. The arguments regarding social media influence and the personal anecdotes are relevant but lack depth and analytical rigor. The position is clear, but the explanation of 'why' global fashion has become so influential is limited to general statements about social media and trends. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the underlying reasons, such as the role of globalization, celebrity culture, or the psychological need for belonging, rather than relying solely on personal examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'In addition that' and 'On the other hands i also want to mentioned' are grammatically incorrect and disrupt the flow. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion, the transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'changed', 'dresses', and 'great thing'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'summer actives' (likely meaning activities) and 'unconformable' (should be uncomfortable). The use of 'low level trends' is also vague. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and academic vocabulary related to the topic of fashion and societal influence, and ensure that you use words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('people has changed', 'my one friend wear'), article usage ('the social media time'), and sentence structure ('when a new trend is start the older one is end'). There is a limited range of complex structures, and the attempts at them are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization of 'I' and the use of apostrophes. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a good starting point for improvement.

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