Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
With the accerelating pace of modern digital world,where infos are easily accessible by society. Peoples are easily influened and attracted by the fahsion company advertisements on the social media. While I agree global fashion is the current trends at the present and it appeal to our younger generation, I would argue peoples should not blindly follow this fashion trend and spends their hard earned money on this.
On one hand, global fashion has been greatly influenced the way people dress today, especially on young adults. They generally spend a lot browsing social media such as Instagram, Facebook and Tiktok. During browsing, advertisement about new fashion trends are easily acessible by them and it start to affect what they should wear during certain events like dates and gathering. Luxury fashion companies such as Louis Vuitton, Gucci and Chanel spend subtantial amount of budget on advertisments. For example, fashion companies often pay or send celebrities and influencer their newest lineup products. So whenever celebrities and influencer start wearing or showing those luxury clothing or handbag on social media, its easily attract and influence what fashion people should wear during th
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 188 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the essay ends abruptly mid-sentence. While the student addresses both parts of the prompt—explaining the influence of global fashion and providing an opinion—the lack of completion means the argument is not fully developed. The position is clear, but the supporting points regarding the negative aspects of fashion are cut off before they can be fully explored. To improve, the student must ensure they provide a full, balanced argument with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay shows a basic attempt at logical organization, using transition signals like 'On one hand' to introduce points. However, the abrupt ending severely disrupts the overall coherence of the piece. Paragraphing is present, but the development within the paragraphs is incomplete. Referencing is generally clear, but the mechanical nature of the linking words limits the flow. To reach a higher band, the student needs to ensure that ideas are fully connected and that the essay structure is complete, allowing for a logical progression of thought from the introduction to the final conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'accerelating', 'infos', 'influened', 'fahsion', and 'acessible'. While the student uses some relevant topic-specific vocabulary like 'luxury fashion companies' and 'influencer', the frequent spelling mistakes and occasional word-choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'infos' instead of 'information') hinder the overall quality. To improve, the student should focus on accurate spelling and attempt to incorporate more sophisticated collocations and academic vocabulary to express their ideas with greater precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'Peoples are easily influened' (subject-verb agreement and spelling), 'global fashion has been greatly influenced the way' (incorrect passive voice), and 'its easily attract' (missing subject/verb agreement). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency would be highly beneficial.
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