Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Global fashion trends have a significant impact on dressing style of the people. I believe that change in fashion trends have negative impact on the people.
Fashion has became the integral part of the people lifestyle. Promotions of the fashion products such as cosmetics, watches and dresses by the celebrities have a strong influence on people's lives. People tend to buy these products because they feel that they are experiencing fashion lifestyle similar to their celebrity.
Furthermore, based on the global fashion trends people dress differently because they do not want to lack behind others in terms of fashion. As a result, fashion trends have a severe impact on the people's lives
Fashion trends have a negative development on the people's lives. Firstly, it increases people have unnecessary spending on their fashion lifestyle. As the global fashion trends changes rapidly, people try to buy new fashion products which often leads to unnecessary debts. Moreover, Fashion trends have major impact on the traditional lifestyle. As the people want to use latest fashion trends, they ignore the traditional lifestyle.A few of the traditional lifestyle may become extinct if the people do not pass it to next generation. For instance, In India, most people wear dhotis, but with the advent of global fashion trends , people started wearing trousers and other fashion dresses . As a result, most people forgot how to wear dhotis.
In conclusion, global fashion has a strong influence on people's lives through advertisements from celebrities. I think that it has negative consequences on the people's lives by affecting traditional lifestyle.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention celebrity influence and financial strain, the arguments could be extended further with more nuanced analysis. For instance, the discussion on traditional lifestyle is a good point, but it remains brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each main point is fully explored with more detailed explanations or additional supporting evidence to provide a more comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'As a result' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive. For example, the phrase 'people's lives' is used frequently, which makes the text feel slightly monotonous. Improving the variety of linking words and using more sophisticated referencing (e.g., 'this phenomenon', 'such trends') would enhance the overall coherence and flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'integral part', 'advent', and 'extinct'. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'lack behind' (should be 'lag behind') and 'negative development on' (should be 'negative impact on'). The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating basic terms like 'people' and 'fashion trends' throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('change in fashion trends have', 'Fashion has became') and article usage errors ('the people lifestyle'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing before commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article consistency will significantly improve your accuracy.
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