Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, people are more influence by using social media and show trending world fashion. This trend influence individual lives in many ways such as, encourage follow new tradition, make carrier in fashion designing as such. I think it is positive development in many aspects. I will discuss my justification further in upcoming paragraphs with valid reasons and appropriate example.
To begin with, world-wide fashion trends are influence in people lives. Firstly, it is give opportunities to people make their carrier in this profession. For example, some people very intelligent to designing clothes in many types this trends is useful for the ideas of making new design. Secondly, some people follow new trending clothes for looking professional person such as, some well known industries advertise job vacancies so they judge not only qualification also looking dressing sense so that way it is useful.
Furthermore, global fashion trends is encourage people, and build strong foundation. For instance, some trading products such as groceries, clothes, or other things sell more in shop, so it is beneficial for retailers to follow trending products advertisements. However, this trend also may have some negative impacts to as such create financial struggle because famous products prices is very high.
In conclusion, the people follow global fashion trend it is useful in their lives. However, it is also aware to the their value because it make financial issue. So, I think follow world fashion trend have many
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the influence of global fashion and providing an opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. The conclusion is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents a full summary of the argument. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 250-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the overall task achievement score. To improve, you should expand on your examples with more specific details and ensure that your conclusion is fully articulated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' without smooth transitions between sentences. The logical flow is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors, making some points difficult to follow. The abrupt ending of the essay significantly disrupts the coherence of the final paragraph. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, complete concluding thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'make carrier' instead of 'build a career' and 'influence in people lives' instead of 'influence people's lives'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range of vocabulary is limited and lacks the precision required for higher bands. To improve, try to learn collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid repeating the same words like 'trend' or 'people' throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('global fashion trends is encourage'), incorrect verb forms ('people are more influence'), and missing articles. These errors are persistent and occasionally make the text difficult to read. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often grammatically flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of auxiliary verbs.
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