Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Nowadays people are getting influenced by the world which they watch online. Today's fashion trends are popular among the people globally. These trends have huge impact on people life. In my opinion, these have both positive and negative impact on people's life.

There are several positive impact on life. This development is positive in term of fashion knowledge. People can learn about new fashion trends and it can inhence their knowledge towards the global fashion. For example, the students of Art and Designing can get enough information about the trendy fashion designs through these online plateforms. Secondly, people can update their life style to see these trends. People can have more ideas about dress designing, stylish accessories from these fashion trends.

However, there are some negative effect on people's life. People easily got influenced by the things they see on internet. Sometimes ,these influencers are showing their one side of the picture. People are starting to make comparision of their lives with the lives of the celebrities they see on social media plateforms. This comparision relieases the inadequate availabilty of resource of a common person to an influencer. For example,the youngesters have some beauty influencer which they followed. They see their details of dress, shoes and household things they show on their pages. These young people try to ordered the same products,which sometimes are very expensive and of poor quality.

To conclude this discussion, i would say that we should follow these trends in a positive way, just to get knowledge and everything that we see on global trends should not to be followed or implimented in our lifes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: explaining the influence of global fashion and providing an opinion on whether it is positive or negative. The ideas are relevant, such as the educational benefits for design students and the negative psychological impact of social media comparisons. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on 'negative effects' could be strengthened by exploring the environmental impact of 'fast fashion' rather than just focusing on personal comparison. The position is clear throughout, but the supporting examples, such as the mention of 'youngesters' following beauty influencers, are a bit generic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced analysis and deeper exploration of the consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Secondly', 'However', and 'To conclude', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is slightly disrupted by awkward phrasing or repetitive sentence structures. For example, the transition between the positive and negative aspects could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'People can update their life style to see these trends', where the connection between the action and the result is not fully articulated. Overall, the progression of ideas is coherent, but the management of cohesion could be more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'fashion trends', 'influencers', and 'social media platforms'. However, there are several spelling errors ('inhence', 'plateforms', 'comparision', 'relieases', 'youngesters', 'implimented') and some awkward collocations ('inadequate availability of resource of a common person'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not prevent understanding. To improve, you should focus on mastering the spelling of common academic vocabulary and expanding your range of synonyms to avoid repeating words like 'life' and 'people' so frequently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'everything that we see on global trends should not to be followed'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'there are some negative effect' instead of 'effects'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. To improve, focus on ensuring that your verb forms are consistent and that you proofread for basic grammatical slips like pluralisation and auxiliary verb usage.

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