Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In the modern span, we have lots of option to ware various dress. People prefer to ware "suitable" and "comfortable" according to their work. Various fashion trend makes significant impact on local community. That's the positive side of any culture.
On the first hand, fashion shows people's image and their work. In some how people have numbers of things to ware but if they started to ware cloths according to their comfort and work so they will be more reliable to do their work. However, trends has a their own varieties which is influenced lots of people. Moreover, todays generation prefer to spend more on looks and fashion so due to that they are easily attract by global fashion trends.
On the other hand, following fashion trend is really phenomenal things because it have such a good benefit; you can illustrates your image best on your meetings, on your events as well as on good occasions. In recent days fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives because it have a various option to ware in addition to that all age group people have a option to ware clothes as per their comfort. Furthermore, it makes positive influence on people's because if they ware cloths according to their comfort so they can do their work wisely and with joy so that kind of benefit have a global fashion.
In conclusion, good fashion and global fashion have a positive side for people as well as Many aspects will help them to improve their fashion things. Overall, that's the "positive" side for people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of global fashion and expressing a clear positive stance. However, the development of ideas is limited. The explanation for why global fashion has become influential is repetitive and lacks depth, focusing primarily on 'comfort' rather than exploring factors like social media, globalization, or celebrity culture. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments are somewhat circular and lack specific, concrete examples to illustrate the points. To improve, you should expand on the 'why' and 'how' with more detailed reasoning and specific real-world examples rather than repeating the same points about comfort and work.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On the first hand' is an incorrect collocation, and the transition 'in some how' is grammatically awkward. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed, making it difficult to follow the logical flow. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', they are often used to connect repetitive ideas rather than to advance a complex argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking phrases will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Words like 'ware' (used incorrectly for 'wear'), 'clothes', 'fashion', and 'comfort' are used repeatedly throughout the text. There are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'modern span' instead of 'modern era' and 'phenomenal things' which does not fit the context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express more complex ideas or nuances. To reach a higher band, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and attempt to use more precise, topic-specific collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'trends has a their own', 'it have a various option'), incorrect verb forms ('people have numbers of things to ware'), and sentence structure. The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'if they ware cloths according to their comfort so they can do their work wisely'. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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