Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, people follow trend in every aspect of life. Especially, in fashion trends they follow people which are influenced by global fashion trends. It gives a negative impact on development and the people of society or nation.
People are very active on social media they watch every serial drama or movie and also social media influencers. They follows the dress up of them and try to dress like them. Which gives a negative impact on the people and the development of the society.
Fashion trend is very In, in our society because people especially generation z follows every fashion trend which is in trending. Every nation follows different religion in every religion fashion trend is not the same.
In religion Islam only burqa is allowed to wear. So following every fashion trend is wrong and people of the society is very cooked that they follow every fashion trend.
Most of the people of our society argued that people should not follow every fashion trend because people follow influencers and from that the development of the society impact in wrong way.
In our country nowadays people follow every fashion trend and they don't know what is going on in our society and they dress up like everyone dresses up they also not following
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both parts of the prompt—the influence of global fashion and your opinion on it—the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. You mention social media and religion, but these points are not fully explored or supported with clear examples. The conclusion is incomplete, trailing off mid-sentence, which prevents a clear summary of your position. To improve, ensure you provide a structured introduction, two distinct body paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting evidence, and a finished conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are often disjointed and repetitive. Cohesive devices are used very sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'Which gives a negative impact' to start sentences. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that flows naturally into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'people', 'society', and 'fashion trend' without demonstrating a range of synonyms or more sophisticated collocations. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'people of the society is very cooked', which is non-standard and confusing. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'consumerism', 'cultural identity', 'globalization', or 'conformity'. Expanding your range of adjectives and adverbs will also help you express your opinions with more nuance and clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people... is', 'people... follows'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragments or run-on sentences, such as 'Which gives a negative impact on the people and the development of the society.' The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and practice combining simple ideas into complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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