Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The way people are dressed today are influenced by global fashion trends. Moreover, global fashion has become such strong influence on people's lives. In my opinion, this is this is positive development. Fashion trends has took over the world widely in the past few years. In the following paragraphs, i will elaborate to why fashion has impacted strong influence on people
Nowadays, people are more active on social media and following trends has become a part of their lives. Furthermore, a trend stays for quite a time but majority of the people follows them so they don't leave behind. Basically, it is human's nature that he is never satisfied. They want to experience new things as it satisfy their desires.
For instance, from all over the world fashion shows are held. People attend shows who are interested in it. Ultimately their ideas expands as they see the work of various artists. The details and story behind every fabric and piece facinates them. They feel confident and dress themselves according to it.
However, on the other hand if there are pros then are are cons as well. Some people don't follow every trend. It might be because it is not upto their liking. They like to stay in their comfort zone as it makes them feel awkward and uncommfortable. But worldwide, most of the poeple are trying to patch up with global fashion trends.
To sum up my discussion, i personally beleive that global trends have made positive development on people's lives.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of fashion and expressing a clear opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the explanation of why people follow trends—'it is human's nature that he is never satisfied'—is somewhat superficial and lacks depth. The discussion on the pros and cons is also brief and lacks specific, well-supported examples. While the position is clear, the arguments are not fully extended, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should provide more detailed explanations and concrete examples to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is sometimes disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' and 'However', their usage is occasionally mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In the following paragraphs, i will elaborate to why...'. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between social media trends and human nature feels abrupt. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarise the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'people are more active' and 'it is not upto their liking'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'patch up with global fashion trends' (instead of 'keep up with') and 'impacted strong influence' (which is grammatically redundant). While the meaning is clear, the lack of more sophisticated or 'less common' lexical items limits the score. Incorporating more precise academic vocabulary would significantly improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The way people are dressed... are influenced', 'Fashion trends has took over'), and punctuation/capitalisation errors (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'). The sentence 'if there are pros then are are cons as well' contains a repetitive error that impedes the flow. While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall quality. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and proofreading for minor slips would help increase your score.
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