Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Generally most of the people follow the fashion according to the international fashion trends , it can produce strong impact on people's way of living , I am strongly believe that it is advantageous development all around the world , In forthcoming paragraph I shall explain my views .
Primarily global fashion trend plays a critical role in individual lives' . we use to watch different shows like podcasts , TV shows , and daily vloggers and our youth immediately get inspire by dressing of famous personalities and they try to follow the trend of their own favorite characters , however sometime fashion is very irrational but it facilitates the transfer of traditions , customs of other countries For example In Islam individual use to wear shalwar kameez the national dress code of Pakistan but now residents prefer to purchase western dresses which is positive development in fashion industry also people feel comfortable in international dresses.
However there are some limitation of global fashion modern and vulgar cloths leads to raps ,black mailing and negligence of traditional culture attires . Asian country are moving away from the traditions may result loss in identity .
In conclusion I firmly believe that global fashion has gain popularity by social media influencers and celebrities .Overall I believe that promoting fashion is beneficial but people should try to maintain cultural values along with trend . so that in future there will be less risk of extinction of our identities and religious values , individuals should try to purchase their belonging according to fashion
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the influence of social media and celebrities is mentioned, the explanation of why this influence is so strong remains somewhat superficial. The discussion on the positive and negative aspects is present, but the arguments—such as the link between clothing and social issues like 'raps' (likely meaning 'rapes')—are poorly articulated and lack logical depth. To reach a higher band, you need to provide more nuanced reasoning and clearer examples that directly support your position throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical or disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'In forthcoming paragraph I shall explain my views' and 'However there are some limitation'. The transition between the influence of media and the cultural impact is abrupt. Furthermore, the punctuation is frequently misused, with commas often replacing full stops, which disrupts the logical progression of your arguments. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms and occasionally struggle with word choice, such as 'vulgar cloths' (should be 'clothes') and 'negligence of traditional culture attires'. There are also issues with collocation, such as 'gain popularity by' instead of 'gained popularity through'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'cultural values' and 'extinction of our identities', the overall range is limited, and some errors in word formation and spelling (e.g., 'raps' instead of 'rapes') hinder the clarity of your message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is a significant weakness. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'global fashion trend plays', 'individual use to wear'), article usage, and sentence boundary errors, such as comma splices. For example, 'Generally most of the people follow the fashion... it can produce strong impact' should be two separate sentences. These errors are persistent and occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your intended meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.
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