Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
IN TODAY'S TIME, FASHION OF CLOTHING IS INCREASE IN EVERY POSSIBLE WAYS. MOST OF THE PEOPLE GET INSPERATION OF DRESSING BY MANY FASHION MODELS OR FASHION BRANDS. FASHION HAS A HUGE IMPACT EVERYONE'S LIFE. ACCORDING TO ME, IT HAS BENEFICIAL AND DISBENEFICIAL RESULTS ON HUMAN'S BEHAVIOUR.
ON THE ONE HAND, FASHION INSPIRES SO MANY PEOPLE IN A POSITIVE WAY BECAUSE MANY THINKS THAT IMPRATIVE FASHION IS A REASON OF CONFIDENCE AND HAVING A GREAT PERSONALITY. FASHION INSPIRES PEOPLE HOW TO CREAT THEIR OUTFITS IN DIFFRENT WAYS SOME FEMALE'S CAN TAKE INSPERATION BY THEIR FAVORITE ACTRESS OR MODEL. ALSO SOME PEOPLE BELIEVES THAT A GOOD FASSHION SENCE COULD BE A REASON TO GET MANY OPPORTUNITIES IN LIFE AND MOST OF THE HUMANS FOLLOW THE TREND OF FASHION INSTADE OF THEIR OWN CREATIVITY OF DRESSING.
ON THE OTHER HAND, PEOPLE WHO INSPIRED BY MODELS OR ACTORS THEY INDIRECTLY TYR TO CHANGE THEMSELVES AND LOOSE THEIR COMFORT. MOREOVER, ALL THE HUMANS FOLLOW THE SAME FASHION TREND AND IT IS THE REASON THAT MANY PEOPLE GET BORED AFTER TRYING POPULAR OUTFITES LIKE OTHER AND THE DEMAND OF THE TREND DRASTICALLY DECREES AMONG BUYERS. SOME TIMES TRENDY THINGS HAS EXPESIVE RATES BECAUSE OF THE DEMAND AND IT HARMS OTHER FASHION BRANDS POPULATION.
IN CONCLUSION, PEOPLE NEED AVOID SOME KIND OF TRENDS AND FOLLOW SOME OTHER FASHION THINGS TO FIGURE OUT DIFFRENT PERSPECTIVES OF FASHION INDUSTRY AND IT ALSO HELPS THEM TO GET A GOOD RESEARCH AND KNOWLEDGE OF FASHION AND HOW TO DRESS WELL ACORDING TO SITUATION.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the influence of global fashion and providing an opinion on its impact. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that fashion provides confidence and can be a source of inspiration, these points are not fully extended or supported with specific, concrete examples. The discussion on the 'disbeneficial' aspects is somewhat vague, particularly the point regarding the 'population' of fashion brands, which is unclear. To improve, ensure that each main idea is supported by a clear explanation or a relevant example to demonstrate a more thorough exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal shifts in the argument. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between 'avoid some kind of trends' and 'good research' is not fully articulated. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'disbeneficial' is not standard English, and 'decrees' is used incorrectly instead of 'decreases'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'insperation', 'imprative', 'creat', 'diffrent', 'instade', and 'expesive'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring accurate spelling. Attempting to use less common lexical items while maintaining accuracy will also help demonstrate a wider range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies primarily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'people who inspired by models... they indirectly tyr to change'. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'fashion of clothing is increase') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing errors in verb tense and word forms. Increasing the variety of complex structures, such as using relative clauses or conditional sentences more accurately, would also be beneficial.
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