Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Global fashion has become a strong influence on peoples lives.
According to me i think it is a positive development.
In recent years fashion has become very popular. young generation does not ready to compromise on fashion. Fashion is important because it represent your personality. Brands played a major role in fashion development. If we notice in recent years many brands has launched in the international market like Gucci, LV and and Armani. these type of brands play a vital role on fashion development. Also some local brands has also launched in every part of the world. Fashion is good because it represent you that who you are. That is the reason that fashion is important for everyone.
Everyone has a right of doing fashion. Fashion is that you wear a expensive clothes fashion is something that you wear a proper clothes according to latest in the market. Fashion reflects a man personality. Fashion create a different type of senses to live a social life. Fashion is not famous among the men it is also famous among the women.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both parts of the prompt—explaining the influence of global fashion and stating your opinion—the ideas are underdeveloped and repetitive. For instance, you mention that fashion represents personality multiple times without providing concrete examples or deeper analysis. The position is stated, but the lack of length prevents a full exploration of the topic, resulting in a response that is only partially developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into short, simple paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs effectively. For example, the transition between discussing brands and the definition of fashion is abrupt. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure feels mechanical rather than flowing. To improve, you should use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your arguments more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'fashion' and 'brands' without much variation. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'does not ready to compromise' (should be 'is not ready') and 'doing fashion' (should be 'following fashion'). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to incorporate more precise terminology related to the topic, such as 'consumerism', 'cultural identity', or 'globalization'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'many brands has launched' (should be 'have launched') and 'fashion represent' (should be 'represents'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization or ending with run-on thoughts. While the errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.
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