Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It if often argue that nowadays style of people are influenced by global fashion trends. Advancement in the technology has become a crucial in influencing on people’s daily lives which have both positive and negative aspects in the development.
Global fashion trends has a strong role in order to influence people into western their daily live’s especially in teenager and mid-adult age group. People tends to follow trends according to the influencers and celebrities. Social media plays crucial role. Through different platforms people learn and have ideas how the things work. This ultimetly helps people to transform them into different version which might be effective in self-esteem and growth.This can make individuals creative in sense of fashion into global platform which they can gather attention from various social media and follow the passion with side husstle. For instance, various fashion trends are now in hype and people follow these trends in order to level-up their fashion.
On the other hand, in the past people used to follow the tradition and reflect the culture by wearing typical traditional costume unlike in the present. Being a nepali I feel proud for having a country with various culture with different ethnic group. Due to increased global fashion trends new generation might not be able experience norms and value of rituals and costume of the culture. For example, during festivals or cultural events there should be compulsion of wearing the costume and jewellery according to the culture.
In conclusion, gobal fashion has play vital role in life in various ways. Its has postively influenced in some people live’s where as adverse effects can in seen in the different generation people due to lack of knowledge and experience in witnessing cultural costume of various countries. Hence, this can be overcome over the time period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of this trend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention social media and influencers, the explanation of how these specifically drive fashion adoption could be more detailed. The discussion on the negative impact regarding cultural identity is relevant, but the conclusion is a bit vague, suggesting that the loss of cultural norms can be 'overcome over the time period' without explaining how. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument that directly links back to the prompt's questions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices, such as 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and some transitions are missing or awkward, such as the abrupt start to the second paragraph. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the use of cohesive devices could be more varied and sophisticated to better link ideas within and between paragraphs. Improving the use of linking words would help the essay read more smoothly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word-choice errors, such as 'western their daily live’s' and 'side husstle'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'compulsion' in the context of cultural attire. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'influencers' and 'rituals', the overall control is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form and context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Global fashion trends has', 'It if often argue'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors (e.g., 'live’s'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, and the control over complex sentences is inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralisation would significantly improve your score.
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