Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, the aspects of the way people dress has a great influence in today's fashion trends. This essay will dwells on the and statement i believe this is a negative trend as it erodes cultural identity and causes the loss of unique heritage textile crafts.
To begin with, people are purchasing new varieties of dress each and everyday and fashion become a strong influence on people's lives. Production of new and trend related clothes needs better clothing materials, so consumption of more resources such as wool, cotton and silk can cause less availability of these clothing materials. For example, during the festival season news of several countries has reported as stock market on clothes shown a high demand, and price of materials has increased, so middleclass peoples are suffering for sufficient money to buy dresses.
In addition, fashion trends is influenced by many celebrates by promotion and individuals who watch the movie is getting attracted by the dress they wear. More usage of clothes like wool and silk leads to problems for the animals and which company pressures the animal by providing more and more food resources this can cause health problems to sheep due to high food consumption and leads to extinction. For instance, in India availability of less wool leads to high decline in the wool industry.
To conclude, there are numerous factors that affect the way of people dress today in the influence of global fashion trends and this causes many negative impact on the development of future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of global fashion and expressing a clear negative stance. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The first body paragraph attempts to link fashion to resource scarcity, but the argument is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear logical connection to the prompt. The second paragraph focuses on celebrity influence and animal welfare, which is a bit tangential to the core issue of global fashion trends. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments are often under-developed or rely on generalisations that lack sufficient depth to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'In addition', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately, such as the awkward phrasing in the introduction: 'This essay will dwells on the and statement i believe'. Referencing is occasionally confusing, and the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the overall logical progression difficult to follow at times.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'news of several countries has reported as stock market on clothes' and 'middleclass peoples are suffering for sufficient money'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of precision and the reliance on basic vocabulary prevent the essay from demonstrating the flexibility required for a higher band. Some terms are used incorrectly, which occasionally hinders the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('fashion trends is influenced', 'the aspects of the way people dress has'), incorrect verb forms ('This essay will dwells'), and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often marred by errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The majority of sentences contain errors, which significantly affects the overall accuracy of the writing.
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