Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent decades, global fashion has developed rapidly and become exceptionally popular among the people all around the world. Altough this trend creates many problems, I believe it is positive development now that it gives more clothing choices and gives cultural exchange .
One of the main positives why the development of fashion is beneficial is that it gives more clothing options. Due to developing online markets and fashion, most of the people want to wear trendy clothes. As a result, old fashioned dresses and handbags are produced to make more choices. Finally , people have to access to search information about global fashion from their own houses. Another advantage is cultural exchange. As fashion continuous to develop in different countries, many people go to various states so that they want to buy them.
Admittedly, global trend may lead to many problems. They can be expensive and traditional clothes may disappear. For instance , new trendy colthes may never be affordable so few people don't afford them if they want. Furthermore, wearing only old-fashioned dress may tent to disappearing our tradition.
By way of conclusion, I once more reiterate that while global trend may cause many negative influences, I think it has more upsides which for individuals and society. If governments create companies to manufacture national dress wisely, this trend will continue to benefit with country traditions and culture.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
Javob topshiriqning ikkala qismini ham qamrab oladi, global moda ta'sirining sabablarini aniqlaydi va aniq fikr bildiradi. Biroq, esse 250 so'zlik minimal talabdan kam, bu esa g'oyalarning chuqurligini cheklaydi. G'oyalar dolzarb bo'lsa-da, ular biroz yetarli darajada rivojlanmagan; masalan, 'cultural exchange' tushuntirishi noaniq va aniq misollarga ega emas. Xulosa muvozanatli nuqtai nazarni taklif qilishga urinadi, ammo qisqaligicha qolmoqda. Yaxshilash uchun siz o'z argumentlaringizni aniqroq misollar bilan kengaytirishingiz va mavzuni yanada chuqurroq o'rganishga imkon beradigan so'zlar soni talabiga rioya qilishingiz kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Esse paragraflarga ajratilgan, bu o'quvchiga tuzilishni kuzatib borishga yordam beradi. Kirish qismidan asosiy paragraflar va xulosagacha mantiqiy oqim mavjud. Biroq, bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanish biroz mexanik va ba'zan takrorlanuvchi (masalan, 'Another advantage is', 'Furthermore'). Ba'zi o'tishlar majburiydek tuyuladi va gaplar o'rtasidagi bog'liqlik silliqroq bo'lishi mumkin edi. Havolalar odatda aniq, ammo g'oyalarning umumiy rivojlanishi yanada murakkab bog'lovchi so'zlardan va murakkab argumentlarni bog'lashda xilma-xil yondashuvdan foyda ko'rgan bo'lar edi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Lug'at vazifa uchun yetarli, ammo doirasi va aniqligi yetishmaydi. Siz 'good', 'problems' va 'choices' kabi asosiy atamalarga tayanasiz. 'Altough', 'continuous' (o'rniga 'continues' ishlatilgan) va 'colthes' kabi ba'zi imlo xatolari mavjud. Ma'no odatda tushunarli bo'lsa-da, yanada murakkab yoki mavzuga oid lug'atning yo'qligi yuqoriroq ball olishingizga to'sqinlik qiladi. Yaxshilash uchun moda va globallashuv bilan bog'liq kollokatsiyalarni o'rganishga e'tibor qarating va yozuvning professional ohangiga putur yetkazadigan asosiy imlo xatolarini tekshirib chiqing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
Esseda oddiy va ba'zi murakkab gap tuzilmalari aralashmasidan foydalanilgan. Biroq, 'it is positive development' (artikl tushib qolgan), 'people have to access to search' (noto'g'ri fe'l tuzilishi) va 'few people don't afford them' (noqulay ibora) kabi tez-tez uchraydigan grammatik xatolar mavjud. Tinish belgilari ham nomuvofiq, vergullardan oldin keraksiz bo'sh joylar qoldirilgan. Garchi bu xatolar muloqotga butunlay to'sqinlik qilmasa ham, ular umumiy ravshanlikka ta'sir qiladigan darajada tez-tez uchraydi. Artikllar, fe'l shakllari va gap tuzilishini nazorat qilishni kuchaytirish balingizni sezilarli darajada oshiradi.
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