Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It has been observed that, the dress code is a symbols of institutional discipline. A group of people believe that, clothes trends are easily effect today's society. However, others are argue that, fashions are influences people in a certain limits. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the advantages with the topic that, people mostly affects with the clothing trends because of the movies and advertisements.
In my view, firstly, the positive side of the fashion is, people are get updated with the modern society, it may cause increasing varieties in the clothing industries. There are enormous benefits to the stay engaged with the trend, because individuals should try to change themselves. In addition to that, most of the group of citizens are influence by the movies as well as TV programs. To cite an example, as per the survey of the Times of India in 2024, one of the famous Bollywood movie, student of the year. Most of the youngsters, especially girls influence by the dress codes of the actress.
Furthermore, another reason is, people are quickly follow the advertisements of the different types of clothes. Additionally, these types of advertisements also given by the famous celebrities and it is not only beneficial for the people, but also it increases the sales industry as well. For instance, individuals watch plenty of advertisement and they easily purchase it from the designs.
Conversely, we cannot ignored few it's negative side, there are few drawbacks of the fashion. After the trends becomes old at that time the old fashion clothes are do not wear by the people and they purchase new clothes. A bunch of individuals think that, it is waste of money. However, citizens should have self-control that decrease purchase pf unnecessary things.
To conclude, fashion impact a positive development to the society and people are stay connected with the world. There are few negatives, but the brighter side overshadows the darker side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention movies and advertisements as influences, the explanation remains repetitive. The position is clear, but the arguments lack depth and specific analysis. For instance, the discussion on the 'negative side' is brief and lacks a strong link to the broader concept of global trends. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation and a more sophisticated example to support your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In addition to that' and 'To cite an example' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'it is not only beneficial for the people, but also it increases the sales industry as well,' where the pronoun 'it' lacks a clear antecedent. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the ideas flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'clothes trends are easily effect' (should be 'affected') and 'sales industry' (should be 'retail sector'). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with word forms, such as using 'influence' as a verb when a noun is needed or vice versa. To reach a higher band, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary related to consumerism and societal trends.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'others are argue' and 'clothes are do not wear'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas appearing frequently, such as 'It has been observed that, the dress code'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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