Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is argued that global fashion have a strong influence on people's lives. This is a positive development because these global fashion trends become popular among people by different social media platforms and new brand shops are open in local areas. This essay will discuss the main reasons of this trend before presenting my opinion.
On the one hand, there are several advantages of global fashion trends.
A key reason is that a considerable number of people use different social media platforms, as allow them to search different International famous brands. Furthermore, daily advertisement ensure people engage with famous brands which lead them to new clothes design and fashions.Another contributing factor is that several brands display new design on social media platforms for attract the attention of young generations. For example, In Pakistan, Maria.B brand is popular all around the world and open it's delivery whole the year. Therefore, the social media platforms motivates individuals to buy products online and give review to promote these products.
On the other hand, there are several brand shops open in local areas. The main reason is that the infrastructure roads and buildings provide excess to brand shops. Low-income families also visits these brands for bought products on sales, which enabling them use branded things with Low-budgets. Another factor is that the social media influencers promote loacal brands that is beneficial for local people.
In Conclusion, although social media pl
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response is incomplete, as it cuts off abruptly in the conclusion, which prevents a full development of the argument. While you address both parts of the prompt—the influence of global fashion and your opinion on whether it is positive or negative—the under-length nature of the essay (236 words) means that your ideas are not fully extended. The position is clear, but the lack of a finished conclusion and the limited depth in the body paragraphs mean the response only partially addresses the task requirements. To improve, ensure you complete your essay and provide more detailed explanations for your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a basic attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'Furthermore'. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and incomplete sentences. The abrupt ending significantly impacts the overall coherence, as the final paragraph is left unfinished. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between ideas could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, fully developed conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'infrastructure', 'influencers', and 'contributing factor'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'open it's delivery' instead of 'offers delivery' and 'provide excess to' instead of 'provide access to'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the vocabulary is generally limited to common, everyday language. To improve, try to use more precise collocations and ensure that your word choices are contextually accurate, rather than relying on direct translations or slightly misused terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('global fashion have', 'advertisement ensure'), incorrect verb forms ('for attract', 'for bought'), and punctuation errors. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and infinitives to improve your accuracy.
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