Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Due to significant factor, the influence of global fashion have possessed people minds. This is the era of media and every person want to adapt a trendy look they are watching in fashion industry. Its loss of unique local cultural identities, the rapid rise of environmentally harmful overconsumption, the economic decline of traditional local artisans, and the promotion of exploitative labor practices in developing manufacturing regions .The trend of baggy jeans and net shirts which are barely visible are terrifying stuff but numerous influencers are promoting them and shutting down masculine fashion sense of men.
However, Numerous trends are fascinating but not all and people must have to evaluate that how this influence our society. Most of fashion are just scratch and messing up the with authentic dressing sense. Most of them are weird such as pants down fashion and make boxer or underwear visible to other. In results its disaster of dignity and influencing vulgarity in the term of trend. " Balenciaga " is the well known brand for promoting weird trends nevertheless a variety of influencers are promoting it without taking a look to the consequences on younger generation These days fashion is not enhancing people way of looking its making them look terrible However, this is not a positive development this is wiping out the real meaning of fashion and reinforcing the expensive stuff which is not even reliable. Global fashion industries are not working for the intentions of preserving cultural identity instead it is wiping out
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying the influence of media and expressing a clear negative stance. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention factors like cultural identity and labor practices, these points are not fully explored or supported with clear, logical reasoning. The argument relies heavily on subjective opinions about specific fashion trends (e.g., 'baggy jeans', 'pants down fashion') rather than a balanced analysis of global trends. To improve, ensure each main point is supported by a clear explanation or a relevant example that directly relates to the broader societal impact.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into two paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the flow feel disjointed. For example, the transition between the discussion of labor practices and the critique of specific clothing styles is abrupt. Furthermore, the use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'Most of fashion are just scratch and messing up the with authentic dressing sense.' Improved use of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help guide the reader through your argument more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and occasionally imprecise. You use informal or repetitive phrasing, such as 'terrifying stuff', 'weird', and 'messing up'. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'influence of global fashion have possessed people minds' (should be 'have captured people's minds') and 'influencing vulgarity' (should be 'promoting vulgarity'). While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'cultural identities' and 'exploitative labor practices', the overall range is restricted, and errors in word choice occasionally impede the clarity of your message.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'influence... have possessed', 'every person want'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'In results its disaster of dignity and influencing vulgarity in the term of trend.' The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses and proper punctuation, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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