Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Present time everyone wants looking aesthetic and charming .This is good things and its importants to improve the confidents. my perspective this is a good execute .

first of all, fashion is not mean just wear good clothes it also help to increase the person socializing ethic. In global markets shows so many platform where people find own choice. I believe that concept fashion is very important things in people lives.in this era people are easily find clothes according to their like and also they can create own choice of Dresses.

Additional, most of the people follow any celebrities for example , any actress ,actor and influencer etc. although all designer and creater design and create any garments according to latest fashion and celebrities choice . Add on people find fashion trends when they meet the present fashion and trends. I want to share my person example , last month I had to go my friends wedding and I wanted to looking gorgeous . so I searched on so many platform like amazon, mahlotra fashion app and I also watched many of reels on instagram then I found one reel .the sell their own brand by instagram I did contact with them and asked send me some collection . after that I found one Lehnga it was pretty and l liked color and design so I got my choice of dress .

summary, global fashion trends such a strong influenced by way of people way and also impove their lives and personality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of global fashion and expressing a positive view. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the explanation of why fashion is influential relies on vague statements like 'people find own choice' rather than exploring deeper socio-economic or technological factors. The personal example regarding a wedding dress is relevant but occupies a disproportionate amount of the essay, detracting from a more balanced analysis of the global trend. To improve, you should focus on developing your arguments with more depth and academic reasoning rather than relying on personal anecdotes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear transition between ideas. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'first of all' and 'additional', they are often used incorrectly or are grammatically incomplete (e.g., 'Additional, most of the people...'). The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument smoothly. Paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary cohesion to link sentences effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence builds logically on the previous one is essential.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and often imprecise, which hinders the clarity of your argument. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'good execute' instead of 'good idea' or 'socializing ethic' which is unclear. The repetition of basic words like 'clothes', 'fashion', and 'choice' suggests a restricted range. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'influencer' and 'garments', these are often used in grammatically incorrect contexts. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic synonyms and focus on using words in their correct collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'everyone wants looking', 'fashion is not mean'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. The attempt at complex sentences often results in fragments or run-on sentences, such as 'in this era people are easily find clothes'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before commas and periods. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, you must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of auxiliary verbs, before attempting more complex structures.

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