Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In modern time, the folks are following the worlds's fashion trends and influenced them to copying the dressing style among all peoples. However, this waves of trend are rapidly spreaded to worldwide through intrenet, mobile phones and strong social media influence to peoples.I believe that overall impact on society is positive to make fashion sense more improved.
There are plethora causes that induce these.Primarly, internet become more accesible and affordable in global as folks have access to fashion content.In other words, in past time peoples do not have access to the internet so most of the informations and new fashion style are limited to the small area or town but nowdays impactful contents of dressing styles created by influencers are easily available at every corner of the world and teach to viewers of the new fashion trends. Thus, affordable digital media and easy access to the many as many persons affect the mind and change the style.
Many individuals have creative and imaginary minds to thoughts new style of dressing and fabrics used in to make clothes.For instances, a peoples who does not have boundries of ideas and have special skills in fashion design like to marketing their creativity. And with advertisement young people easily tend to influence and buy the new designed clothes.For example, whenever i watch advertisement, reel of new varity of clothes or cool designed jeans i create eggarness to buy them as soon as possible.
As result there positive development created in social groups.One of them is, youngster can introduce their mind blowing and unimaginary skill. Students can show new fashion to the whole world and can get chance to be professional designer. However, bad influance also create like few fashion styles are not accepted in society due inappropriate appearance of style of cloths.
In conclusion, global fashion trends teach peoples about fashion sense, varity of dressing styles.Although, some fashion trends are not acceptable.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention the internet and influencers as drivers, the explanation remains repetitive. The discussion on whether it is positive or negative is present but lacks depth; for instance, the mention of 'bad influence' is vague and not fully explored. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument rather than just listing observations. The position is clear, but the supporting evidence could be more analytical to meet higher band requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'In other words' is used incorrectly to introduce a new point rather than restating a previous one. Additionally, some transitions between sentences are abrupt, such as the shift from the internet to individual creativity. While there is a logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and occasional awkward phrasing makes the flow feel disjointed at times. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. You rely on basic terms like 'folks', 'things', and 'good/bad'. There are also frequent errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'spreaded' (spread), 'accesible' (accessible), and 'unimaginary' (unimaginative). While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range of vocabulary and the recurring errors in word choice prevent the essay from demonstrating a more sophisticated command of the language. Focus on learning collocations and using more academic synonyms for common words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('internet become', 'peoples do not have'), article usage ('in past time'), and tense consistency. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often marred by errors, such as 'as many persons affect the mind'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense before attempting more complex structures.
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