Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
There is no denying that so many people aspects the way that the people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends has become a common feature of the modern life across the globe. while majority of people welcome this development because of its numerous advantaged, others are quick to point to its drawbacks. The following paragraphs will examine the both side before reaching a clear conclusion.
The most significant advantages is that the people of different countries have different fashion trends. For example, the fashion of the different countries can influenced in many countries but in some others countries the fashion trend is not influenced by the people. A further benefit worth mentioning is that the people love there cultural fashion dress and also advertise their dress in all our the world, as illustrated about the dresses.
On the other hand, this trend is not without its drawbacks. First, the main disadvantages of the global fashion trends influenced the people todays is that when we buy any dress to other countries the become very expensive. Second, the people loved the other countries fashion but the do not influenced are reach the trend in our country, as shown by the following fashion trend. Finally, when the people do not reach the following fashion then the copy the following fashion in our own resources.
In conclusion, neither the advantages nor the disadvantages of the following trend that the people influenced the most can be dismissed outright; the issue is best understood as mixture of both. On balance, however, I strongly believe that that fashion trend in very expensive should be underestimated.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt but fails to develop ideas clearly. While you mention advantages and disadvantages, the arguments are repetitive and lack logical support. For example, the claim that 'fashion of the different countries can influenced in many countries' is vague and does not explain how global fashion influences lives. The conclusion is also confusing, as it suggests that fashion trends should be 'underestimated,' which contradicts the earlier discussion. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by specific, relevant examples that directly answer the 'how' and 'why' parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often unclear. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'In conclusion,' but they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not connect the sentences logically. For instance, the transition 'as illustrated about the dresses' does not actually introduce an illustration or example. Referencing is also problematic; phrases like 'the following fashion' are used repeatedly without a clear antecedent, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would significantly improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often repetitive. You frequently use the word 'fashion' and 'trend' without varying your language. There are also several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'people aspects the way' and 'the do not influenced are reach the trend.' These errors sometimes make it difficult to understand your intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise collocations related to the topic of global trends and cultural influence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the people loved the other countries fashion but the do not influenced'), word order, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack clear grammatical relationships, which impedes communication. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and checking for correct tense usage. Reducing the number of errors in simple sentences is a priority before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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