Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Globalization change the way people dress up these days, as they follow the latest fashion trends. Although some suggest that people should not follow blindly the glob trends and choice the attire according to their culture. However, I firmly believe that it is essential in todays world to be presentable according to the fashion trends.
While there are several reasons that why people follow the global trends , the social media remains the pivotal factor above all. As individuals watch international movies, adds and fashion shows on the social media, which encourage people, specially youngster, to copy the way of clothing. This trend, not only helps them to know about other countries trends , but also alleviate the issues of insecurity , as almost all college going students follow international fashion. Consequently, social platform remains the most crucial factor in this trends.
Another equally significant factor is traveling, these days people travel internationally, due to business trips, vacation or some time for study purposes. This is why people, check the later trends across the globe, so they can buy their clothing accordingly, which helps them to enjoy their visit to other country without any issues regarding fashion. Therefore, it is clear it is vital to change the ourselves according to the current fashion style.
In conclusion , fashion plays a pivotal role in whole world, which is why I believe that it is necessary to check the fashion trends to stay updated. Therefore, dressup according to latest trends can enhance the personality and boost confidence.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument that following trends 'alleviate the issues of insecurity' is asserted but not clearly explained or supported with strong logic. While a position is maintained throughout, the discussion lacks depth and could benefit from more nuanced examples beyond just 'college going students' or 'business trips'. The conclusion is brief and repeats points already made rather than synthesizing the argument effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'While there are several reasons', 'Consequently', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'Therefore, it is clear it is vital to change the ourselves'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall progression of ideas. Paragraphing is present and appropriate for the task.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'pivotal factor', 'global trends', and 'presentable'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'dress up these days', 'glob trends', and 'change the ourselves'. The range is sufficient to communicate, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'Globalization change' (subject-verb agreement), 'reasons that why', 'adds' (instead of 'ads'), and 'dressup' (should be 'dressing up'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas appearing throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent the essay from reaching a higher band score.
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