Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In this statement i illustrates about dressing sense and worldwide fashion trends that are included in all age fashion scope.The strongv views about global fashion on people lives are strongle recommended and explained hereThe positive and nagative impacts boths are important in it.
In this paragraph global fashion trends are very important in our lives because its play strong phenomenal role in our society and lives.It increase our personality and confidence.It play a very important role in job sectors .Being as a professionalist a nice dressing sense is important in office for good impact.Moreover it brings positive change in people lives and development in brands.People are much aware about fashion now a days thats why the increasing capacity of fashion brands and cloths are in high demand which rise to profits and growth.On the other hand some of its disadvantages are there are lot of expenditures on extra cloths,shoes,bags etc.Middle class or low class people can not bear these expenses which is drawback for our society.People are following trends by seeing others and some trends are not good and promote negative things which are not good for childern and young generation.Because extra money is utilized in it which everyone can not afford even society environment is also effected towords bad behaviour and living lifestyle.It brings latent effect and explore bad things .Time is wasted in useless activities that is one of main factor in global fashion.Moreover moderate change in rising fashion among people makes only interested in spending useless money and time wastage.
In th e conclusion, the fashion trends are benficial on one side and harmful on other side . The results are based on prediction how fashion impact in good way and promote good things and bring capable opportunities for growth and well being of profitable business, while on the other side it brings nagative effects on youth by using unnecessary money on useless things
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention job sectors and confidence as positives, and financial strain as a negative, these points lack specific examples or deep analysis. The introduction is repetitive and does not clearly state your position, which makes the overall argument feel slightly disjointed. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea supported by a concrete example or a more detailed explanation of the 'why' behind your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'Moreover' and 'On the other hand'. Some sentences are disconnected, such as the transition between the discussion of job sectors and the impact on brands. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'professionalist' (instead of professional) and 'increasing capacity of fashion brands'. You also have recurring spelling errors like 'nagative', 'cloths' (when referring to clothing), and 'childern'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of control over word choice and the frequent spelling mistakes occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Focusing on learning collocations and checking your spelling will help you move to a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'its play strong phenomenal role'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors. Some sentences are run-on or fragmented, which affects the clarity of your message. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex structures.
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