Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the modern world, young people's dressing styles are increasingly shaped by international trends and many of them are influenced by their favorite celebrities and this trend has become common and attracted significant public attention. It has become a topic of widespread debate due to its impact on individuals and society. This essay will discuss the positive side and state my opinion.
To commence, I believe is that multiple options will be available in global fashion. In other word, some countries have different fashion trend and another are following different ways of dressing such as in India, nowadays people are more concerned about bellbottom pants to showcase their style but in North America people follow the straight pants. This is because people can express their personality and identity to feel more confident. In addition, cultural exchange and economic growth will be beneficial for businesses. Thus, it will be beneficial for individuals and society in the long term.
Furthermore, another reason is that global fashion can generate money over the changing fashion trends. Moreover, some of the brands start their clothing business and generate sales to follow the upcoming trend and manufacture same garments to generate sales quickly. Although, there are plenty of brands in which they already generate huge amount of revenue to start a trend such as KAPA, a clothing brand start with the selling t-shirt and within one year it produced more than 20 million t-shirts and all are sold out. Hence, it will be profitable in the long term.
Overall, I believe global fashion is a positive development because it gives people more choices and promotes cultural exchange.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of global fashion and providing a clear opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the explanation of why global fashion is positive relies on general assertions about 'cultural exchange' and 'economic growth' without deep analysis. The example regarding the clothing brand 'KAPA' is relevant but lacks a clear connection to the broader argument about why global fashion is a positive development for individuals. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your arguments with more nuanced reasoning rather than listing general benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use cohesive devices such as 'To commence', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore' to link your points. However, some of these transitions feel mechanical or slightly forced. Additionally, there are instances where the referencing is unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the phrase 'another are following' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow of the argument. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'widespread debate', 'cultural exchange', and 'generate revenue'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'generate money over the changing fashion trends' and 'manufacture same garments'. These errors do not impede communication, but they highlight a need for more precise vocabulary usage. To improve, focus on learning collocations—words that naturally go together—rather than just individual synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'I believe is that' (unnecessary verb), 'some countries have different fashion trend' (missing plural), and 'a clothing brand start with the selling' (incorrect verb form). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To achieve a higher score, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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