Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Nowadays, global fashion become a strong impact on people life. I think it is a positive development.
global fashion is a important for our lifestyle. fashion becomes to run with society. We should choose these dresses people inspired with this and look intelligent. it is very important for new generation to build their lifestyle
For Example, dressing is very important for our personality. We should choose these dresses the people see and they think it's a special person of our society
Secondly, dressing is make difference between people like, a business man and the worker. Dressing sense is important for whole people.
When the person is well dressed to fashion trend it's look very special
For Example, the one who have not well dressed he could not inspire peoples and don't run with society
global fashion is very important for our life style. We should run with the fashion trend and difference between peoples.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 154 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the student identifies that global fashion is a positive development, the arguments are superficial and lack the necessary depth or supporting examples required for an academic essay. The response addresses the prompt's two questions, but the explanation is repetitive and lacks the analytical rigor expected at this level. To improve, the student must expand on their points with specific, well-explained examples and ensure the essay meets the length requirement to allow for full development of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are abrupt and often illogical. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'For Example' without providing a substantial illustration. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To improve, the student should focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that supports the overall thesis.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'important for our lifestyle' and 'run with society' are used multiple times, indicating a limited range of expression. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'dressing is make difference' and 'look intelligent' (when referring to fashion). The student struggles to use less common vocabulary or precise terminology related to the topic of fashion and social influence. To reach a higher band, the student needs to expand their vocabulary by learning synonyms and collocations relevant to social trends and personal identity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Basic errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'global fashion become', 'dressing is make difference') and sentence structure are prevalent. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary articles and prepositions to be grammatically sound. To improve, the student should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of complex sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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