Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In recent years, the way people dress today is influenced by global fashion trends and how global fashion has a strong influence on people's lives has become a widely discussed topic. Although, both perspective has their own merits. this essay will examine both viewpoints before explaining why I believe that this is a negative development is more convincing.
Firstly, nowadays the way people dress is very different than past. This is totally due to strong influenced by global fashion trends. Additionally, Due to this emerging technology it has become straight forward to connect to people around the world through video-calls and video-conferencing. as a result influencing people has become easier. For instance, I myself was not so much into collecting shoes which are unique and expensive but due to watching videos on social media, I have started collecting nowadays. Furthermore, everybody in our society has right to choose their own dressing style. Therefore, it is understandable why many individuals get strong influenced from global fashion trends.
Secondly, Opponents of this view claim that it is a negative development. They believe that their traditional way of dressing which holds a significance in their culture is getting away from them. This can be illustrated by women in our local area are now mostly seen wearing different dress rather than wearing a traditional saree or dress. However, I am more convinced by that is a negative development because traditional attire is getting lost in this modern world.
In conclusion, both sides of this debate have their own merits. nevertheless, I believe that this is a negative development , Adopting this approach is likely to make our tradition and culture misdirected.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying the influence of technology and social media on fashion and taking a clear position that this is a negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation of why fashion has become influential is brief, and the argument regarding the loss of traditional culture is repetitive. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced examples and deeper analysis of the consequences of these trends, rather than relying on simple assertions. The introduction is also slightly confused, as it mentions examining both viewpoints but then immediately states a preference, which is acceptable but could be structured more clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the use of 'Although, both perspective has their own merits. this essay...' contains punctuation and grammatical errors that disrupt the flow. Furthermore, the transition between the influence of technology and the personal example about shoes is abrupt. While there is a logical progression, the connections between sentences are sometimes weak, and the referencing (e.g., 'that is a negative development') is occasionally unclear or repetitive.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing such as 'way people dress' and 'strong influence' repeatedly. There are also errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'get strong influenced' instead of 'are strongly influenced' and 'getting away from them' to describe cultural loss. To improve, you should aim to use more sophisticated synonyms and collocations related to the topic of globalization and cultural identity, and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('both perspective has'), incorrect passive voice construction ('get strong influenced'), and punctuation errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters after periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and sentence boundaries.
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