Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

First and Farmost i want to postulate that fashion was a luxury thing in early ages but with the passage of time and from when world has become global it is looked as a necessity for most of the peoples .

It's been a very hot topic in recent dicsussions that is fashion a necessity or a luxury .

Lets be very straight , in my opinion fashion is luxury and we should take it as a luxury not as necessetiy but this perspective is totally opposite to todays peoples thinkings about fashion .I straightly state that the influence of this global fashion development is a very negative point of our society at the moment . But there might be little bit advantage of it on our society .

If i have to justify why i state that this revolution of global fashion is very negative because every person has its own scale of basic needs and responsibilities . For instance ; one person has a big family like he has his sick mother , his childs and some other persons that are dependant on him . He has to take care after all these persons in his budget or salary . But when he saw someone on social media or somewhere around him wearing a very stylish and very expensive cloth or any acessory but he can not afford it but he has urge to buy it . Here comes the negative thing that he starts to compromise on his necessities to buy that thing .

If we consider a positive impact of this development is only that fashion make different cultures to come together to same point .

In conclusion i would only say that fashion is good but not necessary we should wear beautifull clothes but not by getting into the influence of any other person . Because we do not know that what is his entire lifestyle or do it coincides with our lifestyle . So, before getting into influence of any other we should just consider this ideology .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying the influence of global fashion and providing an opinion on whether it is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide a clear example regarding the financial pressure of keeping up with trends, the positive aspect is addressed very briefly in a single sentence, which lacks depth. To reach a higher band, ensure that both sides of the argument are explored with equal weight and that your position is consistently maintained throughout the essay. The conclusion is a bit repetitive and could more effectively synthesize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, phrases like 'First and Farmost' and 'Lets be very straight' are informal and do not serve as effective transitions for an academic essay. Additionally, the logical progression between sentences is sometimes disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. There are several spelling errors, such as 'dicsussions', 'necessetiy', 'beautifull', and 'acessory'. Furthermore, the phrasing is often repetitive, and some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'postulate that fashion was a luxury thing'. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating basic words. Proofreading for common spelling mistakes will also significantly enhance the professional quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every person has its own scale', 'fashion make different cultures'), incorrect article usage, and punctuation errors, such as the misuse of semicolons and spaces before punctuation marks. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often marred by errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Pay closer attention to punctuation rules, specifically regarding the placement of commas and periods.

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