Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowaday's fashion became a passion. Many people show the wear the dress which is popular in global fashion trends. People can't leave without fashion. Thus, these points are discussed in this essay.
In today's era, people can live without food but without fashion it's impossible. In current generation, global fashion are strongly influence on people via social media, international brands and so on. Mostly they are trying to copy the dressing sense from different cultures. Additionally, International fashion brands are giving a huge competition to local brands. Moreover they are providing the all features such as good material, brand quality also at reasonable cost. This is the primary reason that engaging the fashion brand.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, which severely limits the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the prompt by mentioning social media and international brands, the arguments are superficial and lack the necessary depth or supporting examples required for an academic task. The position on whether this is a positive or negative development is not clearly articulated or explored. Due to the extreme brevity and lack of development, the response fails to address all parts of the task adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into very short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Additionally' and 'Moreover', the connections between sentences are often weak or illogical. The introduction is repetitive and fails to provide a clear roadmap for the essay. The overall structure is underdeveloped, making it difficult for the reader to follow a logical argument throughout the piece.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying on simple phrasing such as 'people can't leave without fashion' and 'good material'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'global fashion are strongly influence' and 'engaging the fashion brand'. The range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required to discuss complex social trends. To improve, the student needs to incorporate more precise academic terminology and avoid informal or awkward phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('global fashion are strongly influence'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction ('Nowaday's fashion became a passion'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. Significant improvement in basic grammatical accuracy and sentence variety is required to reach a higher band.
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