Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern world, fashion trend has become an interesting topic as people get influenced by celebrities. Fashion has a strong influence on people's lives as the world is growing people should also change their thoughts towards fashion. I think it has a positive development on this. Both the prespectives is discussed further.

One of the major factor of this is people get influenced by celebrities, as what they wear in day to day life and people tend to copy those styles. As a result, it helps them to cope up with the real trend. Even in many fashion designer companies they have to follow the trend or have to be creative. For example, a fashion designer named Masaba, Sabya Sachi and many more. People go to watch the creativity of the designer and then they sell those clothes which can be sometimes limited in number.

Another is social media platform, many people get influenced on social media like Instagram, Snapchat or Facebook. People try to follow the trend as they see on media. Weather it is about some clothes, bags, or jewellery.

However, it may also have little negative impact as these days people are following the traditional wear. People have forgot about traditions which their grandparents used to follow. For example, in festivals first people used to wear Indian saree or traditional dresses but these in modern fashion trend many people do not wear traditional outfit as they have forget their culture.

In conclusion. although following tradition is necessary but being in a global fashion is also important as it brings a persons interest and individual choice what to wear.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying reasons for the influence of fashion and providing an opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the discussion on social media is brief and lacks depth. The argument regarding the negative impact is also slightly contradictory, as the introduction states the development is positive, but the body paragraph focuses on the loss of tradition without fully reconciling this with the initial stance. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed explanations and ensure your position is consistently maintained throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive, such as starting sentences with 'One of the major factor' or 'Another is'. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the phrase 'Both the prespectives is discussed further' is grammatically awkward and does not effectively signpost the essay's direction. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and lacks a clear summary of the main points discussed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'interesting topic' and 'change their thoughts'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'cope up with the real trend' (should be 'keep up with') and 'following the traditional wear' (should be 'traditional clothing'). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of more sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary limits the score. Try to incorporate more precise terminology related to fashion and societal influence to demonstrate a wider range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('One of the major factor', 'Both the prespectives is'), incorrect verb forms ('People has forgot'), and punctuation errors, such as the fragment 'In conclusion.' followed by a new sentence. While the meaning is usually understandable, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage would be a beneficial next step.

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