Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
fashion play a crucial role in the life of every people as compared to in past people dressed in simple way than today era. some people think that global fashion has a strong influence on people. I believe that it has both advantages and disadvantages which are discussed below.
to commence with, global fashion has positive impacts because of this people can know about different type of fashion trends, culture of other country fashion. apart from this, people get updated about new trend and follow them to get themselves updated about latest trends for example a fashion of foreign countries are followed by various countries even it in related to food, clothes, hairstyles and so on.
moreover, because of strong influence of global fashion people try different fashion which makes them more beautiful and they can enhance different beauties of other countries in addition, people gain the knowledge of varieties of fashion even it is related to culture, food, technology, brands and so on which is not possible in the past because in past people try to live, wear simple things.
on the other hand, global fashion has some drawbacks, because of influence of global fashion people are forgetting their traditional way of leaving, weaning. apart from this, people waste lot of money on buying thing without having the need of thing which creates lot of wastage.
to sum up, according to my point of view, global fashion has both pros and cons as it influence people in both way.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the reasons for the influence of global fashion and the evaluation of whether this is positive or negative. However, the development of these ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why fashion has become influential are somewhat repetitive, focusing heavily on 'getting updated' and 'knowing about trends' without exploring deeper drivers like social media or globalization. The discussion of advantages and disadvantages is present but lacks specific, well-supported examples. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points made. To improve, you should expand on your main ideas with more detailed explanations and concrete examples to reach a higher band level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'apart from this', 'moreover'). Some transitions feel forced, and the logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by grammatical errors. For example, the transition between the introduction and the first body paragraph is abrupt. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional confusion in referencing (e.g., 'it in related to') mean that the flow is not always smooth. Improving the variety and accuracy of your cohesive devices will help elevate your score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use words like 'fashion', 'people', and 'things', which limits the precision of your writing. There are also some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'traditional way of leaving, weaning' (likely meaning 'living, wearing') and 'enhance different beauties'. These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations related to the topic of fashion and cultural influence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical inaccuracies, such as missing articles ('in past'), incorrect verb forms ('fashion play'), and punctuation errors. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent throughout the text. The frequency of these errors is high enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and gradually incorporating more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences with greater accuracy.
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