Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Mostly people follows trends , trends may be about to wear shoes , dress, car , dance or any thing else.

In todays technology life gen z most dependent on the social media and spend too much time on scrolling.

Here we discuss in a positive or negative way how has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? In my opinion it's a negative impact on many young nations because most of all people don't know how they dress well they only follows trends celiberties. Essentially they fully not covered themselves and they may bad impact on the urban parents . To see this shameless environment many parents stops their childrens espicially girls don't allow schools , colleges. Hence they remain ill mannered and uneducated as well as not survive in this technology era of life.

On the other hand if media show only appropriate contents that are not out of ranges and accepted by everyone so i think this a huge good impact on all peoples life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the ability to develop ideas. While you identify the topic and state a position, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The discussion regarding the influence of social media and the impact on education is brief and lacks depth. To improve, you must expand on your points with detailed explanations and relevant examples to fully address all parts of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the paragraphing is insufficient. While there are some attempts at logical flow, the transitions between ideas are abrupt and often confusing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the misuse of 'Hence' and 'Essentially'. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs—an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion—and use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' to connect your ideas more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'young nations' instead of 'younger generations' and 'celiberties' (spelling error). The phrasing is often unnatural, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to fashion, media, and social influence, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people follows'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which affects the clarity of your writing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Once these are solid, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences.

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