Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays, global fashion industry has influenced many people's day to day lives. Some people argue that this has become unnecessay buying behaviours, and others contend that people have modernized as per the current global trends. This essay will discuss how global fashion has changed people's livelihood, and I strongly believe that it has more positive developments towards people current lifestyles.
To begin with that, one of the primary reasons is that why global fashion has become such a strong influence on people's lives as it is gobla fashin retails sales have been doubles since last decades, such as market key fashion retailers H&M and Myer have been expanded thier businesses to a lot of countries. This leads to fulfill people's fashion demands. Hence, expansion of global fashion industy has changed people's fashion desire drastically.
Futhermore, development of fashion become positive impacts people lives due to new business opportunity has been created. As per huge demand of the fasion such as clothing, jewelleries. New job opportunitis has been created and it increased the people livelihood. For instance, many cities have larg shopping malls and most of the shops are related to global fashion shops and they have created thousands of occupations thoroughout the years. Consequently, it is beneficial for many familis and small and medium busnesses to provide services and raw materials.
In conclusion, Although people spend more money on fashion, global fashion has become part of the human lives, and this essay has argued that is has positive development as it creates many jobs and oppoertunities. Therefore, fashion is nessary part of the people daily lives.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the influence of global fashion and whether this is a positive or negative development. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention business expansion and job creation, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The essay is quite brief, and the analysis of 'how' global fashion influences lives is somewhat superficial, focusing primarily on retail expansion rather than the psychological or social aspects of fashion trends. To improve, ensure each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation of the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'Consequently'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as in the phrase 'To begin with that, one of the primary reasons is that why'. The logical progression between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the flow feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally will help improve the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and contains several spelling errors (e.g., 'unnecessay', 'gobla', 'fashin', 'thier', 'industy', 'fasion', 'opportunitis', 'familis', 'oppoertunities'). While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'retailers', 'occupations', and 'livelihood', the range is limited. Many of the errors are distracting and suggest a lack of proofreading. To reach a higher band, focus on expanding your range of synonyms and ensuring accurate spelling of common academic and topic-related words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'global fashion industry has influenced' (missing article), 'why global fashion has become... as it is gobla fashin retails sales have been doubles' (incorrect sentence structure and verb tense), and 'development of fashion become positive impacts people lives' (missing prepositions and incorrect verb form). These errors occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct use of articles, and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed with grammatical precision.
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