Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.

How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many people believe that , many way people dress today are influenced by fashion trends. However , there are both positive or negative development . Moreover , my viewpoint will be dicussed ensuing paragraph .

To commence with , many aspects of the way resident nowadays influenced by global fashion trends , it is many positive development , Primarily , in the past 100 years lot of individuals follow old fashion trend such as women only wear suits , saree . Moreover , nowadays men and women follow new fashion trend the wear all type of clothes like jeans , t-shirt , lower , shorts, and other fashionable clothes . For example , on holiday , birthdays and special events masses were only comfortable clothes . Secondly , global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives . However , in recent years most of people follow the trends because the follow their culture and most of people open a new brand clothes company the made all type clothes and lot of resident buy them. for example , new trend come into the market , when people buy according fashion cloths and influenced by global fashion.

Moving further ahead, there are many negative development , Firstly , nowadays , young generation forget their culture and they only wear comfortable clothes according to their personality . To explicate , on spacial occasions like Holi , Diwali individuals do not wear traditional clothes , they think it is a old fashion so they do not wear. secondly , the younger generation do not have any kind of information about their clothes culture and history , so they do not follow old fashion trends . For instance , in recent years most of persons build a fashionable clothes company they do not know about the culture and how old traditional clothes made.

In conclusion , both are positive and negative development . In my perspective , people do not have information about their culture , they only prefer global fashion trends .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, but the development of ideas is inconsistent and often lacks clarity. While you mention both positive and negative aspects, the arguments are frequently repetitive or difficult to follow, such as the section regarding 'culture and history' which lacks specific, logical support. The position is stated in the introduction but remains somewhat vague throughout the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea that directly answers the 'how' and 'why' of the prompt, rather than listing general observations. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', but these are often used mechanically or incorrectly. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logic within paragraphs is weak. For instance, the transition between discussing fashion trends and the impact on culture is abrupt. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when using pronouns like 'they' or 'them' without a clear antecedent. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one, creating a clearer progression of ideas throughout the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'clothes', 'fashion', and 'trends'. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'masses were only comfortable clothes' (likely meaning 'wore') and 'resident' used to mean 'people'. Some words are used incorrectly, such as 'spacial' instead of 'special'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word formation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Expanding your vocabulary to include more topic-specific collocations would significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede the flow of reading. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'most of people follow'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, and punctuation is often misused, particularly with excessive spacing around commas. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for basic punctuation errors would also be highly beneficial.

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