Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Today, i want to talk about fashion trend.Most of the people are way to dress from global fashion trends.They follow every new trend that they see. If one trend is most viral most of the people follow those trend.In modern age of science and technology every person wants that he look separate from others.He follow every new trend to look separate.If his trend is viral majority of people follow his trend.He influenced every global fashion trends.Fashion trend almost popular every where. That is why,it,s need of every people.
The global fashion become a strong influence on peoples lives.It is because ,today world is modern world world.Every person use social media, he follows trend there.If they do not change theirs life the people who theirs surrounding are arguments to their.That is why he follow every every new trend and fashion.The rich people follow every new trend but if the middle class can not follow every fashion,the rich people thinks that we become strong than others.
I think that it is negative development most of people can not follow every fashion.Theirs expense are very high that is why they has not enough ,money to follow every trend. The reason is that if they see rich people to follow every new trend and fashion their mindset are very disturb.They can not pay heed to their work .global fashion starts a big difference between rich and poor people .So that is why rich people has lost their minds.They thinks that we became stong and no body can harm us.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying social media as a driver of fashion and expressing a clear negative opinion regarding the social pressure it creates. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the 'rich and poor' divide are repetitive and lack specific, well-supported examples. The essay tends to over-generalize, and the explanation of why global fashion is influential remains somewhat superficial. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed, logical explanations for your points rather than repeating the same sentiment in different ways.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into three paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'that is why' and 'if'. Referencing is often unclear, particularly with the use of pronouns like 'he' and 'his' when referring to people in general. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical flow, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument consistently.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. There is a reliance on simple words like 'good', 'bad', 'strong', and 'trend'. Some word choices are inaccurate, such as 'arguments to their' or 'mindset are very disturb'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an awareness of collocation. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms related to sociology, economics, and fashion, and work on using them in appropriate contexts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the rich people thinks', 'their mindset are'), article usage, and sentence structure. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty or punctuated incorrectly. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing after commas and periods. Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and grammatical accuracy is required to move beyond this level.
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