Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In todays world there are many aspects of the way that people dress today like influenced by global fashion trends. Additionally it is also become such a strong influence on people life. From my everyday experience and observation it is a negative development. Below in this essay I will explain my some major reason and examples.
In our todays world many people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. it has many disadvantages. First of all it is destroying old traditional culture For instance many people in my hometown are dress up like todays influenced by global fashion trends in this way many people will forget their old culture.in this way they will live stressful life because if they will does copy some body they will not live delighted life.
Second of all it will be the reason of some bad things because we are Muslim and short dress is also not allowed in our region.
Additionally the global fashion become such a strong influence on peoples lives I has also some negative or bad effects on our world. in this way a lot of people distract from the direction of their future plan. this is also one of major problem in strong influence global fashion trends.
Global fashion trends on people life is negative development as compare to positive but it also have some positive that people can do anything what they want in their life. in this way there will not be difference in people life. in this way people will be in one fashion trend.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, but the development is limited and repetitive. While you state your position that global fashion is a negative development, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped. For instance, the point about traditional culture is mentioned but lacks specific, well-explained examples. The argument regarding religious dress is also brief and lacks depth. To improve, you should focus on expanding your ideas with more detailed explanations and logical reasoning rather than repeating the same points. The conclusion is somewhat confusing and does not clearly summarize your main arguments, which makes the overall position less persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'Second of all', they are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, and the referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'in this way' is used repeatedly to connect unrelated ideas). Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'global fashion trends' and 'in this way' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'live stressful life' instead of 'live a stressful life' and 'distract from the direction' instead of 'are distracted from'. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use more precise terms related to the topic of fashion and cultural identity. Avoid repeating the same phrases and try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms to express your ideas more clearly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many people... are dress up'), article usage (e.g., 'live stressful life'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, and punctuation is often missing or misused, particularly with capitalization at the start of sentences. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and paying closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the use of articles.
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