Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In many people belive, that the way dress influenced by world wide fashion trends. i think that is positive development because its have also negative impact in socity but its make people life flexible and comfort.
on one hand, the fashion become such a strong influenced on people's lives. when the people know about fashion they make their life confident. for example people wear their clothes with their own choice then they choose fit and comfort cloths for their self.
On the others hand, the people gain knowledge about fashion then they repesent their skill and their nations cloths. The people make their self independent to open their on fashion shop. They lives their life to wear their own choice clothes. for instance when some program give opportunity for show about fashion and then these time people show their talent and other people see these type of show and they really influenced by there.
in conclusion, the global fashion play more strong role for people lives. the fashion really make people confident and this make people do something and earning money.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both parts of the prompt—explaining the influence of fashion and providing an opinion—the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The arguments regarding 'confidence' and 'earning money' are mentioned but not clearly linked to the global nature of fashion trends. To improve, you must expand your points with specific examples and ensure your position is consistently maintained throughout the essay. The current length prevents a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'on one hand' and 'in conclusion', the transitions between sentences are often disjointed, making the argument difficult to follow. Referencing is frequently unclear, such as in the phrase 'these time people show their talent', which lacks a clear antecedent. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that supports your main thesis statement.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms such as 'people', 'clothes', and 'fashion'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'represent their skill and their nations cloths' and 'make their self independent'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of your intended meaning. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'globalization', 'cultural identity', or 'consumer behavior', and pay closer attention to word forms and standard collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammar is characterized by frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage. For example, 'In many people belive' and 'its have also negative impact' demonstrate a lack of control over basic English syntax. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and the reliance on simple, error-prone sentences makes the writing difficult to process. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of pronouns and prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.
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