Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends.
How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people's lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It has been observed trending of global fashion influenced men's personality.I presume that the benefits of these precautionary actions would surpass itsd drawbacks to a major extent. The inclination is elaborated in ensuring paragraph with examples. The foremost one, it can be seen fashion trend increased day by day by social media plateforms like tik tok, instagram,facebook etc, and by influencersetc. there are different global fasion brands such as zara, Gucci,H&M etc. Many people feel good when they follow their fashion trend. It boost their confidence in diiferent ways.moreover, It also help to meet different culture trends. For example, when you wear jeans and shirts you follow european culture in the same way when you wear shalwar qameez you follow eastern culture trend. Furthermore, it also increased the jobs in fashion designing which also gives positive impacts on economic growth.In addition, people feel motivated when they wear diferent designing dress. For example, if you do fashion designing you and you are good to design clothes you can earn handsome money by doing jobs ib different global brands On the contrary, I also overlook some disadvantages by following the fashion trend it reduces our traditional trend.It aslo increased consumerization. For example, by following the western culture we reduce our traditional trend to wear shalwar qameez. To conclude and offer my position. although, there are some demerits but i would say it has more merits then demerits.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying the influence of social media and brands, and providing an opinion on the development. However, the response is under the minimum word count (235 words), which negatively impacts the development of ideas. While the position is clear, the arguments are somewhat simplistic and lack depth. For instance, the link between fashion and economic growth is mentioned but not fully explored. The introduction is also slightly confusing, using the term 'precautionary actions' which does not fit the context of fashion trends. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the structure is hindered by significant formatting issues, such as excessive spacing and lack of proper indentation. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'On the contrary', the flow is often mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas feels disjointed. The conclusion is very brief and lacks a strong summary of the main points. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'trending of global fashion' and 'consumerization'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'precautionary actions' in the introduction. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as 'plateforms', 'influencersetc', 'fasion', 'diiferent', and 'aslo'. To improve, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and collocations. Expanding your range of synonyms will also help you avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles ('increase the jobs'), incorrect verb forms ('It also help'), and punctuation errors, particularly with spacing and capitalization (e.g., 'tik tok, instagram,facebook'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for punctuation and capitalization errors. Practicing the use of complex sentences with correct subordination will also help improve your score.
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